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The Night Whispers Daydreams

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The Night Whispers Daydreams

 

 






The break of dawn has always been
a tantalizing, tender sin
the days first kiss, softest of sheen
the break of dawn has always been
the best my eyes have seen

The setting sun has held a place
within my heart, it's lines could trace
such tenderness, and gentle grace
the setting sun has held a place
causing my heart to race

Deep in the darkness of the night
my soul's inspired, and dreams take flight
the stars release my urge to fight
deep in the darkness of the night
when hoping is my right

The four stages of night and day
where children sing, and angels play
it's when I hold my soul at bay
the four stages of the day
watch time passing away





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This is an anonymous contest, please do not use my name in comments please. I decided to try a nature write.

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Comments

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  • Sarah957
    September 1, 2007
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    This is eloquently written. Congrats on your trophy!


  • Lauren Noir
    August 18, 2007

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    This is beautiful!
    Just beautiful

    I saw so many images in my head, it was stunning
    The language was beautiful
    It seemed a little sensual, and beautiful
    Like the nature you described

    it was so peaceful
    It made my heart just melt

    I loved the rhyme, it really worked well

    Well done
    And good luck

    Thank you so much for entering

    • SerenityNChains gold member
      August 18, 2007

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      And this comment is as beautiful as she who penned it. Thank you hun for such gentle words. You make me smile.

      Blessed be,
      Billie Jean


  • ms-cuddles
    August 5, 2007

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    Beautiful

    All I can see are angels and starry nights and his eyes that forever burn into my soul. Good luck in the contest. I see a trophy coming your way. Love~ Cuddles


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    August 4, 2007

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    Wow. That was absolutely beautiful. You did an excellent job with this poem, and you deserve to place in this contest. I hope you win!! I loved the lines "The four stages of night and day where children sing, and angels play..."
    Write on!
    ~*~SP~*~

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