if i worte u a poem filled with my thots and feelings would it change the past?
if i sang u a song and told u wot was in my heart would it change my mind?
or if i wrote u a letter tellin u how i feel would it make a difference?
if i cried a million tears to let out the pain would it work?
the anwser is no!
i cant change the past or my mind.. i cant let go of the pain inside.
but i can change my future and train my mind
the pain inside wil be there til i let go.
i dnt share my pain as it hurts me too much to let it out. soon i wont need to hide it.
Please tell me what you think
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grammar is your friend.
"if i worte u a poem filled with my thots and feelings would it change the past?" -- wrote; you; thoughts; you need a comma after "feelings."
"if i sang u a song and told u wot was in my heart would it change my mind?" -- you; you [again]; what; comma after "heart."
"or if i wrote u a letter tellin u how i feel would it make a difference?" -- you; telling; you [again]; comma after "feel."
"if i cried a million tears to let out the pain would it work?" -- comma after "pain."
"i cant change the past or my mind.. i cant let go of the pain inside." -- can't.
"the pain inside wil be there til i let go." -- will; that could be either until or 'til, whichever you prefer.
"i dnt share my pain as it hurts me too much to let it out." -- don't; comma after "pain."
"soon i wont need to hide it." -- won't. -
another great one...
all the best poems seem to be the sad ones.
SeeJ
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