Inundating rationed promises,
in teaspoon measures
of moonshine.
Suspended sallow, champaign lips
blistering over the canopy's fringe.
Torrid licks of unpolished perfection,
nibbling at his spoon.
The lady leeches of the night,
sucking the air stale
of last eve's dusky rapture.
Still refining cadence,
wrapped in a marquee floating with sedation.
Track marks,
claiming his waspy women
prisoners enveloped in twilight cloaks.
Bosoms swelling and sinking
like waves cresting across
looming pristine backdrop.
With the setting of the sun,
as their orange sorbet',
concealing sin
in lemon sweet lies.
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I loved the imagery in this great job
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Very Good Poem
Somewhat deep for my personal taste but well written and meaningful, After I grab the dictionary I'll get the full effect(only joking) It was a nice work of poetry ALEX-G.
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Bravo!! Bravo!! Definitely 5 stars all the way!
Great rhythm and great rhyme!! Absolutely fantastic in its use of vocabulary. The poem's choice of words paints such a vivid picture in the mind of the person who reads this masterpiece of poetic perfection!! I see in this poem the makings of a great poet!! When you get the chance, please, review some of my poems on here. Loved your poem!! Reviewed by ADB5121967.
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