leaves hat arched up
summer storm morning ends path
bridged rainbow kissed
Author notes
Haiku-5/7/5
A contest entry
- Haiku (options) by star wars fanatic.
450 points, ended August 19, 2007, 25 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Hmmmm, i quite like this. Well penned (:
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Thank you
Thank you for the wonderful comment given. Saddie23
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me likes
simple, magical almost,i like it good write
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thanks
I'm glad u liked my ku. Thank u for the wonderful sentiments and the applaudes r a welcome. Saddie23
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simply divine
LOVED IT!!!!!
excellent.
best of luck in the contest!
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thank u
thank u for the applaudes and the wonderful sentiments given to my ku. Saddie23
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You write some nice little haikus here dear This one is very good
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Thank u
thank u for the wonderful sentiments given to my ku. I love the applaudes given. Saddie23
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I love it
So moving -
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Thank u
thank u for the wonderful sentiments given to my ku. Saddie23
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What a sweet haiku to drift through ones thoughts this morning. You have done a beautiful job here.
♥ Touchof1der -
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Thank you
thank u for the wonderful sentiments given to my ku, I'm deeply moved how u praised my ku. Saddie23
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Excellent haiku.. love the detailed imagery, and the picture here. great job.
Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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Thank u
thank u for the wonderful sentiments given to my ku, and the applaudes. Saddie23
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Very nice piece, with some great word choice, but the last line went over the syllable limit by one syllable. Nicely done though, for an out-of 5-7-5 piece.
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Thank u
Thank u for the comments, but one thing I just wanted to point out its in a 5/7/5 haiku format, but the poem keeps shifting and can't quiet figured out how align the ku just right. Saddie23
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Beautiful imagery!
You captured the picture so well in this haiku. Very well done!!!
Good luck in the contest with such a stunning piece!!
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Wow. That was beautiful. You stayed true to the element of nature and seasons for a haiku. Excellent job! I liked the picture as well.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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I love haiku .... this one is really good. Good job
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Great Work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Although I cannot write this style of poetry, I enjoy reading it from time to time. This one did not disappoint at all. You create such imagery with s few words and the picture is perfect to boot. I wish you well in your contest you entered and thank you for sharing this lovely pice of nature with me this morning!!!Great work nce again!!!~~Toni~~
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Promise...sing
The image does more than justice to the text and heightens the overall effect. As you are well aware haiku and senryu are explicitly 5 7 5 (as the contest implies)
Unlike the previous comment which may have been copy pasted I can only count 12 syllables ... perhaps my mistake ?
While agreeing that the number of colours in the rainbow was arbitrarily determined through the prism by Newton's assistant whose eyesight was apparently extraordinarily acute, before leaping the rainbow perhaps it would help to walk through the 5 7 5 wavebands ... afterwards, of course ...
Poetical rules
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thank u
thank u for the critique and as the rules so noted was it didn't have to be in the original haiku format or did I interpret the rules wrong.
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aah... true haiku... absolutely beautiful... it's amazing what you can do with seventeen syllables.
I wish you all the best of luck in the contest
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