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Wife's Phobia My Bliss

My other half suffers from Apiphobia
It’s a fear of being stung by bees
A small pest causes so much dread
Her strength becomes slave to unease.

Bees have charisma to make her squeal
Even a hum fuels her, she jumps off her seat
Scarily she leaps in the air and hugs me
Thus we two halves become one complete.

While I cherish closeness of her being
She repeatedly pleads me to kill the bee

Courageously I slay it and feel macho
With a kiss, she praises me for my bravery.

They say it’s a bad omen to kill bees
But every kill proffers me a prize
Though it’s cruel but I kill for my love
I selfishly hope; her phobia never dies.

~~~*~~~

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re-written for this contest...
http://allpoetry.com/poem/456180

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  • Florida Sunshine
    August 16, 2007
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    Sorry for the long wait~ I'll promise to judge by tomorrow ~ I've been waiting on Dark to give me her two cents ~ She told me earlier~ but there were some additional poems submitted since then. I sent her a message... a few days ago~

    If I don't hear from her by Friday I will close and judge then ~ Let me know if you have any problems waiting until then ....

    Thanks
    Mali


  • Mari Goes gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    You clever one
    I don't like bees around me, but don't like killing them either. A good thing I don't have that same phobia, 'cause there is no macho here to free me of them lol
    Good one mina, thanks for the link


  • zain
    August 7, 2007
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    This was an amazing read. The last two verses were adorable! It put a wide grin on my face I learnt some trivia today, thanks for that
    I really hope this wins you a gold. I loved it. All the best!
    *gives a standing ovation to the brave and fearless hero*


  • baawri
    August 6, 2007
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    This is not a new write. I have read this poem somewhere before while browsing through your works. Anyways I am happy to come across it once more. Keep hte good work and I am sure Aunty jee is not going to lose her phobia soon .
    With love
    Shivani

    • mina nagi
      August 6, 2007
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      Shivani, you’ve a very good memory,,, I’ve another poem similar to this, but this one is recently written… This is the link of the poem you’re referring to..
      http://allpoetry.com/poem/456180

      Thank you for you comments…

      mina

  • meena krish
    August 6, 2007

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    this is soooooooo cute and funny in a lovely way. You do have a way to give your readers a treat! Good luck in the contest and thank you for the comment on mine. Take care.


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    August 5, 2007
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    This was extremely cute. I loved it, and the hilarity of you going after bee for the sake of your wife's love. You did an excellent job on this. The only thing is, in the last line of the second stanza, 'haves' should be 'halves.' Good luck in the contest!
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • DarkenedAuras
    August 5, 2007

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    Wow didn't know that was a phobia but I'm the same about this I don't even like going outside during the summer from this fear...and I fear when my brother goes out during the day because he's HIGHLY ALLERGIC to them :/


  • Deja Vu
    August 5, 2007

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    Cute. I'd run it through spell check though, as "haves" are actually spelled "halves" instead. I like the playful tone, the whole abcb rhyme actually works with the joking nature instead of making it childish. Good job


  • LadyKate
    August 5, 2007
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    That is really sweet that you would do that. This poem made me smile. Amazing job


  • VirginiaDarling
    August 4, 2007

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    I think this is a great poem. It really fits the contest perfectly. I myself have a phobia of spiders, and I act the same way around my husband, "laughs". Good luck in the contests. Keep up the great writeing.


  • Random Goldfish gold member
    August 4, 2007
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    Haha! I love this; it's adorable!

    Good luck in the contest.


  • Thinking About It
    August 4, 2007
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    awwww....

    that is so sweet... good luck

  • Pome
    August 4, 2007

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    nice graphics and really fun poem. I really like bees but no one likes to be stung by them. You put a good edge on a funny situation.


  • Florida Sunshine
    August 4, 2007

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    LOL ~ oh your so mean on the last line~ LMAO GREAT WRITE!!!!! ~ I thoroughly enjoyed this! You did an awesome job!


  • grannyeri gold member
    August 4, 2007

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    What a cute ending to this poem - think you have found your niche in poetry - writing about phobias - LOL. Easy to read and understsand - good rhythm rhyme and flow in these lines. Fun to visusalize too.


  • Stingersinger53 gold member
    August 4, 2007

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    This is so sweet! I guess while in the position of being targeted by the bees, you don't really see the whole story. You have done a excellent job of showing us that and a little sight inside a man's head. I just have one question... Would you still have the macho man feeling if out of the woods a bear came following those bees? LOL
    Just a thought!. Still a very cute and sweet write. Your wife is a very lucky women to have such a warrior to protect her!
    Good luck to you in the contest!
    Hugs!!!
    Cayla


  • Harrisham Minhas
    August 4, 2007

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    lol
    This is funny and sweet.
    A pretty write. Well written.
    Good luck in the contest.

    Harrisham Minhas

  • er
    August 4, 2007
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    wit and dramatic narrative well employed favourite part is stanza 1


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    August 4, 2007

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    this is cool i hate to see living things killed, but if there is aprize at the end then....... i like this it made me smile good luck in the contest

    love & peace
    john

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