Mire and muck
bubble of air
Feel I am stuck
bubble of air
Below the surface
bubble of air
Constantly rising
bubble of air
Feels like I'm moving
bubble of air
Drawn upward and yearning
bubble of air
Must break through the surface
bubble of air
See me? I'm here, I'm here!
bubble of air
I see you, I called you
bubble of air
The body you cast off
bubble of air
Carried you here...POP!
Author notes
It's what's on the inside that counts...right?...
A contest entry
- you are a ... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended August 16, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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See me? I'm here, I'm here!
bubble of air
wow a thought process in great rhythm and end, very aries too alike the beginning of destiny and the process of will in very nicely zen terms, sets the mind to so many memories, festivals, dance floors etc... congrats on the bling reckon it deserved a few higher, anyhoo cheers with beers -jas
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Love your comments...thanks for the cheers...and the beers...lol...Later, AG
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The body you cast off
bubble of air
Carried you here...POP!
You have done very philosophical work to take this subject as poetry my friend ..well done..thanks for such a deep entry...
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Have to say thanks again, Mr. Khattar for another honorable mention. Later, AG
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Appreciate you reading it...thanks alot for saying it's philosophical...don't think most would think that, but thanks..AG
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awesome poem and thanks for you comments
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Hey, thanks for stopping by and lookin at my page, appreciate it...later, AG
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