I want to be your companion
and walk hand in hand,
your strength enveloping mine.
Summer breeze blowing,
scuffing feet and laughter,
sharing nights, not finished by the dark.
I want to be your advocate
as you pen your deepest
thoughts, as your heartaches
bleed and finally break free.
Your dreams, I keep as if my own.
I want to smile as you smile
and giggle with you,
at nothing at all.
I want to be your lover
and find the passions
that move you to action.
I want to be the softness
that induces you to trust.
I want to be the naughty
that makes you come back for more.
I want to please you.
I want to share your breakfast
and your dinner,
I want you in the shower
and in your bed
Your lips of pleasure,
the softness of your skin,
your dazeling green eyes,
the feel of your tiny body against mine,
these are the fuel of my desire
No it is no secret, my love,
and to put it very simply,
I want you.
Author notes
i want the world to know how much Rayne means to me...i love this girl to death...she makes me feel so happy to be alive
Please tell me what you think
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heY i knOw what it feels to feel a love like this i have love for one like this im sUre YOU understand for who that is
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I can understand completely, a love like this is consuming and comforting, and no matter how hard you try to explain exactly you can never really find the perfect words. I think you are very close to getting it across exactly. You speak from your heart, your soul and your love is pure. Excellent work, I think this girl will see how much she means to you and you have definitely written a tribute to her and the love between you both.
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"No it is no secret, my love,
and to put it very simply,
I want you. "
very wonderful poem!!!
such strong love...
you did a great job!!!
Rayne must be one lovely and lucky girl!!
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very nice poem i remember feeling that for someon
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A pleasure to read. A love can bring out so many wants and desires that we can accept the smallest gift of time with them. Great job with this.
Soulful Woman -
Your dreams, I keep as if my own.
I want to smile as you smile
and giggle with you,
at nothing at all.
So beautiful. Your flow through out the poem was on point. I loved the way you broke down your stanzas. Your emotions for this girl are very clear and strong.
~Dommi -
You have really done a great job on this.Your love and admiration shines all the way through this piece.Easy to relate to i feel the same way about my love.You expressed yourself very well.The words just seened to flow effortlessly across the page.You must have put alot of hard work into this.It shoes.
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great( total sarcasim)
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Hm
This is absoolutely lovely verses. I can feel your love and adoration pouring through on this piece. She is absolutely lucky to have you as you offer her, tell her many things no man would. You have a beautiful way with words. The fire line drew me inside, mademe what to read the rest, and the last line just completely, like closed it all up.
THere was nothing I could find wrong or even remotely awkward about this piece. It's gorgeous! -
i love this! its so beautiful and flows very well i think. its simple yet complex if that makes sense.
in ink, me
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Wow
I had to read this a few times to actually get all of it. It deffinitely has a lot of emotion in it. And it seems very personal. Did you write it about someone in particular? Anyway, continue the good work. I found this very interesting and meaningful.
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Tender and genuine
This was not what I expected at all. The title left me with the impression of something harsher, and I was pleasantly surprised by this little piece of tenderness and passion. You have captured something which, to my mind, is very difficult to put in words. And that's the simplicity and beauty of affection. While many a grand poem has been written about undying love and passion, few have been able to put across the quiet strength of true emotion. In this poem there is no pretence, no affectation, only truth, and that is hugely refreshing. A lovely write.
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wow what amazing write such expression and feeling that u have put into this brilliant piece. i understand how u feel cos this is how i feel about my partner i can totally relate from irene
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So, I see you got it bad for that person. A great woman is like a good cook food, eat her when she is hot, very tasty at that time. Keep up the great work and thank you for sharing
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I see a lot of tenderness and sincerity in your words here. There are some deep thoughts and personal reflection infused within the lines that grace the page as well. Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use.
♥ Touchof1der -
Exquisite
I admire any man who wants to be his woman's advocate, but even more so one who says it. This
is a tender and meaningfull poem very reflective of
your feelings for her.
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Now this is just beautiful love! I adore this and you can surely sense the love all the way through. Really truly touching and lovely, great job and thanks for sharing this
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well, i think you have certainly got it for this girl very bad. you did a great job in portraying how much you love her. thank you for sharing this with me today at allpoetry.com. viyanna rosemarie
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Nice poem. Very passionate about that girl. My favorite line is "not finished by the dark" for some reason and the second stanza is awesome.
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No it is no secret, my love,
and to put it very simply,
I want you.
hey... what a beautiful heart you have with your so heartfelt wishes..I love the honesty and the beauty of the words I find here...a great poem indeed..
...this is a revealation kind of feeling...its charm and beauty can be seen in the rythem of the words of this write...I can see the depth and beauty of the joy in your words here in this poem bringing a kind of the calm in the muse and touching the soul somewhere inside..well done
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You Did Good!!!
This is so perfect. I don't know what else to say, It is the type of poem that sends a girls heart soaring. What a lucky girl. You did good!
Anna
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enchanting like a melody.
this poem was like a melody , i could have almost put these words to a tune and sung them, loved it so much.
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I really enjoyed this and I think it is because I can truly relate to the feeling and emotions I got from reading this. It was very beautifully written, I loved when you said "I want to be your advocate
as you pen your deepest thoughts" very touching.
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I really enjoyed this. I'm not sure exactly what it is that moved me so deeply about it... but in my mind it's just an all around great piece. Wonderful job.
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Great
Very wonderfully written. One of the things I love about it is it's so relatable. Love it
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There is nothing like this kind of love. I love my husband so much I could just eat him up..lol This was beautifully written to the one you love. I am sure she will love reading it
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Beautiful work, a wonderful tribute to your love. Fantastically penned, with vibrant imagery and thoughtful emotions. Very good work, keep it up
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The depth of your love and desire can be plainly seen in the words you have penned here. I hope she has gotten to see this. Pen on poet!
midnight lace -
bold beauty thankyou for sharing
this warm dept felt poem with all of us!
Love is so wonderful, and you spoke it well!
Thankyou again for reminding us of it's beauty and glow.
ears2hearyou
Kathleen
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wicked poem. i love how your emotions are true b/c thats hard to come by now a days NE WAYZwicked poem again and hope i can read some more
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Like it
I love this, wonderful -
baby this poem means so much to me and completly expresses how i feel about you!
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wow, this is a wonderfully written poem! you did a great job! I love these kinds of poems... they are so awesome! good work! keep it up!!!!!!!!!
Crimson -
well done
Great passion and feelings put into your poem.
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Yea i just joined so my work is crappy and only one right now haha. But i love your poem.
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You have truly expressed your love for Rayne in this piece. The emotions were laid out there for the reader to grasp and hold on to throughout the write. Great job.
Soulful Woman
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