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enmity

please offer me advice
i'm sure to be amenable
i promise that i'll listen
and i will be agreeable

life at this moment feels so cursory
i wish i could go back
just as everything was falling into place
and not within the cracks

i was feeling effervescent
like i wouldn't be foresaken
and then you stole my happiness
all my foundations have been shaken

your guile is outstanding
and your insularity is clear
but you can't admit that
this is all out of fear

so now i must expunge my feelings
and i will abhor your image
until you find the time to clean up
this mess you've engendered




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  • Eternalsyn16
    August 3, 2007

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    your word choice is amazing, i really liked it alot. I also really liked the third stanza, "i was feeling effervescent..." the rhyming scheme was kind of wierd, but all around a good poem.