False ideals
flash anorexic
on billboards,
magazines.
I don’t need substance,
I need grapefruit
and sprouts.
What cannot be starved off
worked off- is
nipped off,
tucked, sucked,
and fucked off.
I am not that girl,
not the pre-pubescent
no hips, no tits, image
I’m told to strive for.
Never been a centerfold or
a card board cut out
for anyone’s pleasure.
Wrapped in stretched skin and fat, I am
full of softness- and I am real. My breasts
move when I move and my obsession with
diet Coke is about taste not image.
Enough psycho-babble bullshit. I am not
your jr. high fantasy, your mother, or your whore.
I am a woman and I am not perfect.
A contest entry
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525 points, ended September 7, 2008, 136 entries
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Comments
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Thank you very much for being patient with me, and entering my contest.
I like you. When I conquer the world, you'll be with me to create new definitions of humanity. Good poem, quite the manifesto.
Would become stellar with minor additions of imagery. You have the message already, why not give the delivery? -
Nor do you have to be perfect ...
and this is a good poem, but the rules say no sex, no erotica, no profanity, etc. This could do well in many another contest here, but it can't do much in this one. Perhaps you'd like to remove it and enter one that follows the rules of the competition? -
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I didn't see any rule about profanity. I'll remove it.
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Well I am glad that I am no the only woman who is ok with the fact that her breasts move when she does... I am a full figured woman..And I am ok with it!! I am by no means fat, but I am full where I should be and oh so soft to the touch!!! I have earned these curves and would not change them for anything!!!! Good for you for yelling it in the face of society. Even if it was not what this contest was looking for...You need to re-enter it in a rant contest!!!
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Well... you did not follow directions and this really was not what I was looking for. Thanks anyway, maybe next time.
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I thought I did follow the directions. Write about a young beautiful body. That's what I did.
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You didn't say in your author's notes what it was that you were talking about. ... Besides, I was really not looking for rants... rather... paying homage.
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Oh. I'll take it out then.
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This is a great poem. I love your very real take on what could have become an insipid prompt in the wrong hands.
I really enjoyed it. You should be very proud, as a poet and a spokesperson for women.
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"My breasts
move when I move and my obsession with
diet Coke is about taste not image."
That line contains the entire story of my life. Really. You just made my night.
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Powerful message of sad truth of how shallow society can be...
The sad truth is that the tabloids help to popularize the skeletal look, and this unhealthy obsession with the "Hollywood glamour." I'm a middle-aged man, and I see women of all ages being compared with the airbrushed images that grace the news stands. We've forgotten what it means to look beyond the outer image, and look deep inside a person to find what's real, and not manufactured. What lies on the outside is often far uglier than the igniting beauty within those (both men and women) who have far less on the outside. Paris Hilton *cough* could learn a thing or two from you. I admire you for speaking your mind. Good for you!
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Ooh! That's like an in-your-face speak out!
I love how you've developed this and made the statements in fact-like form.. That gives it more strength. And everything is to the point. love the ending and the way you rub truth in each word. people really should be detached from the social images. works a lot better.
thanks for the read!
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omg, this is one of the best, real and upfront writes i have read in a very long time and i applaud you for that. yeah, i moved here to Cali a few years ago from Ohio but you know what, to me at least the girls here have at least a "little" bit of meat on their bones. want to see it bad? go to ohio
anyways, i love how you stand up for who you are
best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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"not the pre-pubescent
no hips, no tits, image
I’m told to strive for."
This part is a bit shaky for me in the wording. I think it's more to do with the first line and the second line. How it tries to connect to each other yet doesn't.
I think, if you're going to use "pre-pubescent" it should be the one word "prepubescent".
That's the only problem I had with the piece.
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:] Simply amazing!
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