my lips are serching for yours
the shadows still play their game
my lust for you comes up short
and i only learn your name
the candles of my memories
are silently blown out
there once were chances for you and me
but where are those chances now?
i tell you that i long for you
i hide the tears i cry
you tell me if my heart stays true
that your love will remain mine
now i reach out my hands
and tell you to grab me
but time shifts its sands
setting it's horrors free
your hands slip away past mine
and my tears now streak my cheeks
we went too far and crossed the line
trying to escape our memories
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much luv~
kitty
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Very good, my dear. Amazing work.
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thankyou, your so sweet to me!
much luv~
kitty
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you expressed your thought process very well. makes me yearn for something more too. this a good piece. good luck with the whole online romance thing! definately feels challenging!
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Pretty good as far as feeling and emotions go, I did think you over used a couple of words here and there but an over all good peice, I liked it. I think a lot of people out there can really relate to this having more or less probably been in the same sitation but you just gotta keep on the look out and try not to give your heart out unless you're sure you wanna be with that person. I wish you the best of luck though and if you need to talk or anyone to listen, I wouldn't mind listening and giving my advice.
-Jared-
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Beautiful write... you make the reader understand your yearning. May you find the answer to this (online) romance! And very well done with this piece.
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I think there are many people trying to escape memories. Talk to anyone in AA. Most seem like they drink to escape something. Nice write.
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