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Serenading the Moon

She serenades the moon
every night
hoping it will return
her true love to her.

 

He went away to sea
many months ago,
with no word,
nothing but that moon
and the eagles
that soar so near.

 

Darkened clouds,
billowy and haunting
circle as if
they are bringing news,
terrible news
that she is not ready
to accept.

 

So her violin and she
bring to the moon
sweet love songs
to lure it
into returning her lover,
a fervent cry
as if she will die
if the music stops.

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  • Celticmoon
    January 30, 2008

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    Never let the music of the heart stop
    Both background and poem are a pleasure to the eyes.

    Keep it forever flowing!
    Blessings
    Bel


  • Sweet Jane
    August 11, 2007
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    very lovely poem


  • Forms of Me
    August 6, 2007

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    Wonderful Poetry

    I really love this....Patty I have not been on here much of the late. I have had so much to keep me busy. I just love making time to read your work.

    Liz


    • pattyann4500
      August 6, 2007
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      Thank you so much, Liz. Yes, I noticed I haven't seen you for awhile. I guess you're keeping busy. I hope you are well, my dear friend.


  • Sherry gold member
    August 6, 2007

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    Patty,

    So haunting and yet so beautiful and sad

    another emotional and amazing piece reflected.

    Huggles, Me

     


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 5, 2007

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    Wow,

    You go girl with your romantic, passionate self! I love this, so sad, yet so beautiful how love stands the test of times.. Truly divine, peace sweet soul, and my fav string instrument is the violin by the way..Your words can wake the dead.. Love you, and thanks for sharing, peace..-Timothy aka poeticweaver~ xo


    • pattyann4500
      August 5, 2007
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      Thank you, Timothy. YOur comments are always so sweet and encouraging. Hugs, Patricia


  • Beating gold member
    August 4, 2007

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    this is really good. You pulled out something amazing from that picture, and I really like it. Serenading the moon. I could really feel what she is feeling, and I love the first stanza. Truly amazing!


    • pattyann4500
      August 4, 2007
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      Thank you. It is an honor to write using such a tremendously telling picture. Hugs, Patricia


  • leo2
    August 4, 2007

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    Your message matches the picture perfectly. No wonder the ancients attributed such power and mystic to the moon. I've always been drawn to it's beauty and majesty. Good luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


    • pattyann4500
      August 4, 2007
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      I love the mystique of the moon. It's breathtaking on any evening. Thanks, Leo.


  • debilynn gold member
    August 3, 2007

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    i like this! i think that is a cool picture also. i like what you wrote about it. i was just thinking along those lines but it looks like you beat me to the punch! great job sis! keep writing! God bless you always

    • pattyann4500
      August 4, 2007
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      Serenading the moon was the first thougth that popped into my head when I looked at this picture. Thanks, Sis. Hgus, Patricia


  • The Poetic Angel
    August 3, 2007
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