As I’m walking with you on the moonlit shore
I continue to think of you and nothing more
For every time I have gone astray
In the dark
Your love has always shown me the way
This time never again to part.
As the moonlight sets in your eyes.
It gives my heart a slight surprise
Happiness warms my heart
But I’m afraid to act will set us apart.
Your love sets my soul ablaze
But my heart is shrouded with haze.
Will my love be rejected,
As I have come to expect it?
Or will you welcome me with open arms,
Never again for me to do you harm.
I have already given our friendship a fresh start
But can our love start anew?
And as the sun begins to rise,
I picture your smile in my eyes.
Warming and caressing me.
Oh! Can’t you see?
I Love You
As those words are so fleeting and few.
And you know there is only one thing left for me to do:
Lie still as my heart beats for you
A contest entry
- MY FIRST CONTEST: I WANT LOVE RIGHT NOW. PREWRITES ALLOWED...COME IN AND CHECK OUT by the-gifted.
600 points, ended September 26, 2007, 108 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything Goes.......But it has to have emotion by Nikki Rowles.
450 points, ended March 17, 2008, 70 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Invite Only Contest [For Nighttime Angel's Favorites Only] by Nighttime angel.
1410 points, ended March 29, 2008, 68 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything goes....the second time... by Nikki Rowles.
600 points, ended June 13, 2008, 73 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Cookie Luvs You!!
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AWESOME!
what a lovely write man!?! this was just simply off the hook... i love the structure, well spaced out, somehow just creates the soothing effect! and your words were so magical and lovely! this left me with an enchanted sensation! a truely beautiful!
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Wow okay...I love it it leave me reliving the past ans speechless thnkyou for a great entry...
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I love this poem.. OH my I truly do.. I love the rhyming and how the words just flow so beautifully.. the poem itself is so beautiful.. I can relate to the emotions in this piece very well.. I really love the last 2 lines.
Excellent job with this poem.
thank you for entering & good luck
kat
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OMG....
How have I not read this one before....I love it, this one is better than Breath of Life, wow nate, I didn't realize it was you that had written this untill I got down the the cookie luvs you comment...this is a very good write nate and my new fav.... -
beautiful
this poem is sooooo sweet...i love the last two lines...omg...ur poems are sooooo good!!!i love this poem...good job!! and keep writing!! -
When the time is right your love will shine in abundance. A lovely write in which I can feel your warmth.
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I see echoes of your heart, so blue and questioning here, but Love recognizes it's own in reflection and grace. I hope it finds you, in smiling embrace.
~K
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Lovely Poem
You have written such a lovely poem. Yes love and friendship go hand in hand. Sometimes it goes back and forth. I can really relate to your words at this time. You take care, Sandy
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this is pretty good,well said and descriptive in nature,your love shines in this piece so wonderfully... good luck...
Linda
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Beautiful!!!
Once again, you've given all of us a lovely glimpse into your heart, mind and soul! I really enjoyed reading this poem!! Thank you so much for sharing with all of us!!! My favorite lines are:
"As the moonlight sets in your eyes,
It gives my heart a slight surprise"
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"And as the sun begins to rise,
I picture your smile in my eyes."
Keep up the great work!!!
Peace and love always, Cyn
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BREATH TAKING
Lie still as my heart beats for you...words of such tenderness and love...deep emotions flow softly from your pen and touches the heart like a sweet caress.Beautiful!...can I have my breath back now
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aww that is so SWEET!! great write. thanks for entering and good luck in my contest. that is the cutest thing ever.
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This was awsome nate, I enjoyed this part the most "Will my love be rejected,
As I have come to expect it?"
Because I know how it feels. this is an awsome write.
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