I hear her at night,
alone in her room.
I see her during the day,
looking downword at her shoes.
When she acutally looks up at me,
I know the look in her eyes
I know it all too well.
The tears slowly form
and they take her breath away.
She tries so very hard
to be the perfect child
for her mommy and daddy.
They don't see her try
and make herself better,
They don't care
to even bother to ask
how she is.
She pretends that she doesn't care
and she sees so many families
laughing and joking around with each other,
but it just makes her sad
deep down inside.
She hates to admit it,
but it does.
She makes a mistake
every once in awhile.
She tries so very hard not to,
but she slips up.
The regret washes over her
and the tears that she's been hiding
comes out all at once.
All her work that she has done,
is gone with a single slip of the blade.
She must be the perfect one,
and she know she's not.
She hides her ugly sins underneath her bracelets
the ones she had made for herself.
She is the perfect one,
and she tries hard to keep that image up
but slowly it's cracking away,
as they finally see
that their perfect daughter
is nothing
more
than
a
cutter.
She lives a double life,
keeping it away from everyone.
But she's tired of hiding it,
all she wants to do
is scream out,
"I am not okay!"
to the world.
She is the perfect one,
or so people thought..
Author notes
Justathinkin' a little too much. Lol hope you guys enjoy. =)
A contest entry
- silent screams we make by moonburndcheese.
300 points, ended February 4, 2008, 34 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i loved it. I related in a major way, but more than that, it was just....well, spoken from the heart. You did this person (you, me, anyone who's ever felt this way) justice with your words.
congrats on the silver. -
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Thank you! ^_^ i'm proud of it. =)
I do believe that this is one of my best ones that Ive written in such a long time. I'm glad you enoyed it. =)
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I think that this explains the shame behind being a cutter so well. Even though my experience is somewhat different from this, I can definitely empathize.
I like how you put each word on a separate line in this part:
"...that their perfect daughter
is nothing
more
than
a cutter."
Thanks for a great poem. -
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Yeah, that's what I wanted to do, explain different reasons cuz people just think cutters are crazy, which isn't mostly true. but, thanks. =)
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this is such a strong poem and i really enjoyed reading it... i know what its like to try to be perfect and trying to impress the parents but in the end they dont know that is also why i am a cutter well thank you for entering in my contes
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Yeah, it's hard to keep trying to be the perfect one and do everything that they expect you to be. After years and years trying to do that, I had to give up cuz it was just making things worse. Anyways, good luck with judging the contest. =) Take care.
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aww this is so sad...so true too..beautiful
avec amour *~Krymsin Kyss~* -
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thank you. =) i put a lot of work into this one than i have in some of my recent poems. Lol.
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