Long ago...
your tongue
trickled with treacle.
Soothing souls
with sweetness.
Then...
message mutated
madness infused
raspy radon rattling.
Your bitter breath
became crudely cloying
laced with aroma of almonds.
Author notes
30 word quickie: toxic whispers
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie! 10x30x30 by Twins 4 me.
450 points, ended August 3, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Clever girl!
~Tia
No, no alcohol, just trying to amuse you while I get caught up on your poetry marathon! ha!
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Well you may want to pop one!
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Beautifully written! Love your choice of words!
"Your bitter breath
became crudely cloying
laced with aroma of almonds"
I thought this ended well. Your talent shines through in all that you write. I haven't read anything of yours that I haven't liked!
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interesting compelation this
Lotta M's
message mutated
madness infused
good words and well done. congrats. laced with the aroma of almonds.hmmm I love those.
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Oy!!
Me Love this piece girly!!
and You mention my alliteration
This one grabs the reader hard!!
Love it!!
Had to take a picture of it
and the aroma of almonds...
Ooooooooooooooooooooooh now that reminds me
of a few things
I used to hear that term...
She smelled like almonds...
but had rigamortis issues too
Magnificent!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Very good! Love the imagery and alliteration in this piece. Well done! Thanks for entering.
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I like the alliteration you used. Wonderful take on the prompt, good luck!
FallenPoeticAngel
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Prompt: Toxic whispers
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