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Lisa at Helen's Tomb

And if she plays with me with her shirt off,
We shall construct many Iliads.
And whatever she does or says
We shall spin long yarns out of nothing.
---Sextus Propertius, Ezra Pound.

 

 

 

 

Lisa with eyes wide

in candle light asked for a poem,

and demanded,

with sweet smiles that he read it

too,

what could he do?

Putting Ezra down, he smiled,

and led her to the tomb...



It was Paris of long robes
who entered her rooms
his fierce eyes disrobing her,
how could she resist his rough fingers,

his cruel lips.
and later when harsh war
darkened the sky
and they were lovers
did she not sigh
when he sheathed his sword
and made his way toward the crowded gates
where men swore
and laughed at his lack of haste?

Thus when the sun caught her hair,
the battered boats upon the shore
the vast plain
the very walls themselves
light with her name,

yet only Paris knew the flame
his hand upon the handle of his blade,
the echo of her lips
upon his fingertips,

the smell of her hair,
the sound of nightwords

in the dawn air
before the raising of the gate,
the blood & fire
of costly day.

Author notes

Painting, David: Helen & Paris, 1788.

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  • Danna Hobart
    August 13, 2007

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    Looks like Lisa has been doing some role playing The most my husband and I ever did was play the happy hooker and the john, or the traffic cop and the speeder

    I am starting to get a real feel for the character. Is she based on someone you know? The style is a little different for you, at least from what I am used to from you I am not sure how I feel about all of the off-rhyme in it, but it does work very well in the third stanza.


  • glispa
    August 13, 2007
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    beautifully done


  • Nephalaneous lover
    August 10, 2007
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    very interesting, great write


  • nichtmich silver member
    August 7, 2007

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    Fantastic swirls of ideas and images. Tombstones of Paris and rough fingers. Love is crazy sometimes, this captures those fragments that make up the puzzle.


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    August 5, 2007

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    man I hope she gave the wimp some backbone!
    This is marvelous...a real honest to god history poem that works on all levels including the erotic.
    Helen...one of my favorite characters

    good going L., pass the kylix


    d


  • IronIcecream
    August 4, 2007

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    Makes me wonder about the Trojan horse that made Trojans destroy the gates.

    Were those the gates of Troy or Helen's gates?
    Gotta ask Ulysses about that...


  • still.she.waits
    August 3, 2007
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    wonderful


  • jantastic gold member
    August 3, 2007
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    splendid

  • C. G. Sheahan
    August 3, 2007

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    Excellent.. Does not obide by the modern rules of popular poetry. Just like the subject, the poem seems to come from another time. An older tale.


  • ca ne fait rien
    August 3, 2007
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    filthy poet.


  • cvillelisa
    August 3, 2007

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    I find myself enjoying this poem. I think I'll read it later too and enjoy myself some more.


    It is a poem in a pome in a pome. Plus then that poem that you were gonna write but didn't cause this showed up.


    I once wrote a poem about that painting. It was a prompt from Ariosto. Lots of stuff in that painting. The symbolism abounds when you start staring at it.


    what does nephalaneous mean anyway?


    p.s filthy.



    Lisa

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