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creation

 

 

 

 

this city opens
its tunneled mouths
 

 
                        swallows 
             unmasticated masses

 

 

 

 

   of

 

 

        books   

                   sculpture   

 

      plays     
                                    paintings     

                       architecture       songs

           sermons

                                  whispers

 

 


 

the sound of half a million people
              fucking
                         on any given night  

 
                 absorbed in cast iron gut

coursed through lead pipe vein

 

 

 

          unsatisfied
      it lies         back

  

                                 skyline protruding
 
      a n d

 

 

               farts poetry

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • afroqban
    February 1
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    I love how the words are placed on the pager, made it that much more interesting


  • lunarlunacy
    January 29
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    dig ur style man.


  • wildbraten
    December 2, 2007

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    Well this is the second poem of yours I have read and you have so far shown a talent for the O. Henry ending to a poem.

    Great surprise ending and very droll.

    A billion moons ago in a pub in Norfolk I met a group of cavalier type poets whose central metaphors consisted of scatological references. One droll young fellow read aloud a verse about sticking his ass out a window and spraying diarrhea on his lover passing by on the street below.

    I frankly didn’t appreciate it as much as I should though of I suspect, but I just spent a miserable fortnight on a dodgy side of Kings Lynn.

    Your scatological reference though completes the “moment of duration” crux of an imagist poem. “cast iron gut” is lovely and the opening lines evoke a gritty feel of a subway system.


    A. W.


  • Dienush
    November 21, 2007

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    This is brilliant, and I'm sorry for my utter lack of constructive criticism on it. I love it all - the images, the rawness of it all, the truthful tone to it.

    ~Diana


  • SpinCycle
    October 20, 2007
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    .


  • J.J. Sass
    October 17, 2007

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    I love this! And I love your alter ego, and I love the idea of farting poetry, and I love that you spread ideas across the page... and I think you get the picture. LOL


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    October 1, 2007
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    i loved this.....
    and let out a tineeeweeenieeecuntfart

    (i had to)

    • blur
      October 1, 2007
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      LOLOL... you had to?


      • Grunts Girl gold member
        October 1, 2007

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        well, all boys know girls dont poot..

        fpppfft...
        oh dear...
        i am loose in the front of my undies..

        pardon me

        *wiggles out of room with knees together*


  • mantis180
    September 29, 2007

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    This poem kicks ass on so many levels, I absolutely love it. Excellent job Mr. Blur.

    -Ashley


  • Tony El Great silver member
    August 3, 2007

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    Loved It

    You know, having tons of multiplexual sex is such a big part of the bonus of living in the civilized society that makes up the city ¦:¬)


    • blur
      August 9, 2007
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      I'm glad you liked this... tons of multiplexual sex, sounds like having relations with morbidly obese women in movie theaters...


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 3, 2007

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    Well, I would love to visit that city that farts poetry like this, because it must be a very interesting and inspiring place that creates poetry like this! Loved the layout and the way the thoughts jump about until it ends in poetry! Wonderful...

    ~ Nicolette


    • blur
      August 3, 2007
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      thank you, this city spews a lot of things, some of which is poetry...lol


      blur


  • Cat gold member
    August 3, 2007
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    LOL


    • blur
      August 3, 2007
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      i have a flatulance problem out of which i tried to make beautiful poetry and you laugh at me...


      blur

      • Cat gold member
        August 3, 2007
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        no really..

        good poem


        • blur
          August 3, 2007
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          my friend dericlee warned me about you... i just finished reading his wonderful book, you should buy it if only for the wonderful cover art...

          • Cat gold member
            August 3, 2007
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            crap.. i just slaughtered that word after i corrected your spelling.. dammit!


          • Cat gold member
            August 3, 2007
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            i think you mean buy-

            its the right wing conservativism that drew you together- right?


            • blur
              August 3, 2007
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              have you ever seen the movie brokeback mountain, i think that will explain everything...


  • misselaineous
    August 3, 2007
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