Time passes by
As I observe the stars-
Diamonds in my watch.
Please tell me what you think
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Very nice and i klove the image this drew in my mind as i read it
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Brilliant last line! Very nicely done poet!
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simply adore the last line..says so much..I too love watching stars!
All the best in the contest!
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Figured I'd check out another of your poems and again I am not disappointed. Another beautiful piece here!!
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love the end
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Beautiful my fello poet. You have executed a beautiful haike here. I hove the last line the most. "Diamonds in my watch". Seems to be so profound.
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My lovely Khahar joon,
Still your deep haiku amaze me and give me a special feeling. They are short but they have too much to say and I love that the most! There is a haiku contest around by azure. You should check it and win one of those shiny trophy!
~Vernal Bloom~
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Bohat Khoob ! Captivating thought, charming imagery and superb presentation ! I loved the aura of the poem; mesmerizing and enchanting. I guess I am learning a little about Haikus from you. Thank you for that implicit guidance. You know, Apee, I had a wild wish yesterday that you, instead of going to Bahrain, come to my university and become my English teacher...Honestly, I would love to be your student.
Keep your magical pen dipped in ink forever !
With prayers !
Naila.
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