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[ Drowning is love; ]

Drowning is love;
Drowning in blood.

Downing forever,
Blood in my lungs.

I feel the walls closing up,
I feel my lungs closing in.

Deeper I go and deeper more,
I feel my way surrounding still;

The waves forever closing in,
I feel myself forevermore.

Lonely in the class,
Lonely in my mind.

I fall asleep and wake alone,
I walk alone and fall asleep.

Drowning in love,
Drowning is blood.

Blood is love,
And love is blood.

I walk until I walk no more,
Slowly burning at your cross.

You call me names, you make fun of my hair;
I am not perfect, I am not you; forevermore dreaming of a way.

A way from you, a world a part, no longer alone;
You are me, and I am gone, you pull my hair you call me names.

I gently slip off and feel alone; drowning is love,
You are blood, I feel my waves slowly disappointing.

You tell me I am no good, you tell me I am not well;
I wished, oh wished, that you .. yes you .. would love me still.

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[5] A poem about drowning

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  • TheStupidLamb
    August 5, 2007

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    Loved how this was abstract and a rush of thoughts toward the end. Just loved it! Thanks for entering my contest!

    Black Ink


    • Kimojuno
      August 6, 2007
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      Thank you for reading.

      And holding the contest.


  • The Hardest Goodbye
    August 3, 2007

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    so sad But I love the layout of the poem and the way that you have it two lines at a time. Very good work here
    xo
    kandy

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