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~ A Flicker Of Dreams~





My night was hollow with echoes of
haunting memories,
Oh how they danced among the shadow
of light that seeped within the window pane,
Like tiny memories suspend in molecules
drifting and fleeting,
Like soft whispers that roared within my
Confucius state of mind,
Memories continued to dance and play
caught in the cobwebs of lifeless dreams,
My body weary, my mind spent, quivering
I hid behind the sheets,
In the morning I woke and the only flicker
left was a trip into a nighttime dream
Filled with memories of you.

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  • islekine gold member
    September 2, 2007
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    well done

    write on!
    *PEACE*


  • Forgotten truth
    August 25, 2007

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    nice poem veary deep and well writen,, dont need the photo,, you see this one in youre mind ,, loved it,,


  • Errant Panther gold member
    August 22, 2007

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    Captivating eeriness through this gives the reader the feeling that even they cannot escape the all enveloping dreams this poems character is immersed in. A hauntingly good read.


  • blondone
    August 20, 2007

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    Love the imagery and the emotions in this read, the flow is perfect and the tones are soft... great write just love the title as well

  • blaizenaway
    August 18, 2007

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    A poem that makes you think while you read how inteligent of you usually it's read then comprehend but I found myself stopping to read for understanding very enjoyable


  • Frogzter gold member
    August 12, 2007

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    Wow sista! This blew me away.... sensual and full of great imagery! Packed with emotion and it left me wanting more!

    Huggles~

    Frogz~


  • poet2angels gold member
    August 7, 2007

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    This is amazing!
    Metaphor, imagery and emotion ever present making this for me, a flawles piece...
    Bravo!

    Lynda


  • Sandygram silver member
    August 6, 2007

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    I can sense the longing in your words. A lovely poem with warm soft imagery. I would say feathery lifght and lovely. Best of luck in the contest. A pleasure to read this morning. Sandy


  • Beverlynohime
    August 5, 2007

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    This is sweet and sad in a way. And I really like that. I love the fact that you're talking about dreams in this sense. ^_^ because I too feel the same way at times about mine. So I can definitely relate to your poem! Really it's very nicely written.


  • Malabu
    August 4, 2007

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    I feel your thoughts

    I believe we all have felt this in life...dreaming and waking to reality... unsure if it ever could be should be or ever was it real...non the less...dreams are reflections of reality...good bad or otherwise hopeful...simply put with poetic nurture...certainly lingers...in my mind...love it
    Mal


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    August 3, 2007

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    dreams can be better

    than the real thing as time precedes with out him there,but in your case the lonliness can be heartbreaking..PM

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