Words spoken so quietly you have to strain to hear,
hardly even breathing as the vocals disappear
I strain to listen, I think I'm going deaf,
sounds I should be hearing but all I hear is breath
preoccupied lip movements that I just can't read,
evolving imagination which lip syncing will feed,
Really just speak up.
Author notes
acrostic
A contest entry
- Find A Feather~ by poet2angels.
475 points, ended August 9, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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eh? sorry i am a bit mutton jeff, you will have to say it louder lol something about whisper chocolate i think, yeah they are nice
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Quite a different perspective on the word whisper...
It sort of reminds me of how I am always being yelled at to speak up since I am very soft spoken
Great take on the word....Clever ending...
Lynda
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I love this! It truly represents a whisper...
beautifully done! -
I'm not sure if the last line was supposed to be serious but the way I read it made me laugh out loud to myself.
A very clever write.
Well done for doing the acrostic form.
Best of luck in the contest.
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This is amazing poetesse... a wondeful acrostic!your detail is AWSOME!
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Hmmm... I like the idea of an acrostic, but I think end-rhyming as well makes what could be a very delightful little poem rather 'heavy' and limits the flow. But nontheless I do think you have captured the essence of a whisper but try to temper your enthusiasm with a little more creativity. The best piece of advice is to read your poem to yourself (both aloud and in your head) several times. You'd be amazed how many things you'll discover in this process. Poetry is, after all, a process, but the rewards are endless.
Good luck in the contest.
♦ ~ crisstiena
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