You can hide the tears, dry those eyes,
Smile for him but the mirror didn’t lie.
Deep inside you’re crying as you're lying on the bed.
Looking at the photos and the pictures that you keep.
When it started, you came together hole hearted,
And held each other until this word departed.
But time weathers the rose when it’s left unguarded,
And the scares left behind will grow cold hearted.
You’re still trying, but you know nothings left,
You keep lying to yourself but you know that’s it's dead;
This loves grown cold; it needed to be said,
But this time you explain it in the letter that you left.
That you’re leaving, and it’s hard to accept,
You’re still grieving, but you’re just trying to do your best;
With the life that you have left, what a mess,
I guess you will both be better off in the end,
Author notes
"Earthquake! Duck!"
A contest entry
- Many Options, Or Your Favorite Poem/Song You've Written by La Tua Cantante.
400 points, ended August 8, 2007, 30 entries
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Great poem, I love the way you caprture the way someone truly feels with a broken heart. Write More!
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What an awsome poem, I'm impresssed! This or these emotions was simply brought out in an amazing way! But you need to put the lines in the authors notes!((read the rules!) You have until the near future to do so! -
It is so nice to read something from you again...it put a smile on my face...and a lyrics.
I thought the words were Great!...I read through it once...then I read again putting music with it in my head.
Would love to hear the music that does go with this...is the music wrote for this yet?
Thought it was Wonderful!
debbie
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Hey pal, it is good to see you back on the site being active. I havent' read your work in a while but it seems your style has changed a bit. Correct me if I am wrong. Anyway, I really loved this piece--there's a few spelling errors and tense errors I would suggest fixing. But the message and the tone were wonderful. Awesome write.
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Thanks for entering, the was really good XD
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