what is it with her
what has she done to me
why cant i control myself
i need to behave
i need to stay away
but her blood is smells so good
why should i torture myself
maybe, i will do it
but no i can risk my family's safety for one stupid human
but at the same time she is oh so special
why is it that she endlessly torture me
with her perfect smelling hair,
and her pale skin,
if i didnt know better id say she was one of us
why is her blood so special
she saw me do things
i have to stay clear of her
but i cant
i cant help but spying on her
why is she doing this to me
why am i going through this endless torture
i think i love her
i need to know what she is thinking
why cant i read her mind
why, why, why torture me so
A contest entry
- Free verse poems .. by Manoj Sanyal.
450 points, ended August 7, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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YAY!!!
THIS IS SOOOO GOOD!!! SHIT, haha, i love your work! -
i would agree with Manoj Sanyal, there is a lot emotion which really adds a lot to this piece. i think thats the biggest compoent of free verse. sorry i can spell for shit. but anyway as i was saying. thats the thing of free verse, its not how it flows, well i guess thats part of it, but anyway, its not how it looks, its the emotion and imagery that is put in it. you really portrayed it well here. keep up the awesome work.
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emotional outburst...good luck
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