James sat in the darkness, nursing a warming beer. The club charged a fortune for drinks, and alcohol was the last thing on his mind at the moment. The strip club was half empty, the patrons mainly businessmen on their way home from work. The current dancer could see that she was not going to get many tips and her performance reflected her lack of enthusiasm. James, oblivious to his surroundings, made repeating patterns on the bar in the spilt beer; just waiting ...
The music ended to desultory applause and the dancer picked up her clothes from the stage and ran into the wings. The MC walked out carrying his microphone, his garish shirt stained with a combination of sweat and rum and blackcurrant. “And now, the dancer that you have all been waiting for ... Teddie!” He walked off and the house lights dimmed.
The light of a small silver spot grew and picked out the elfin form of James’s obsession; motionless at the centre of the stage. She was clad all in black; from black high heels, through black fishnet stockings, black mini and skin-tight black top; all of which contrasted dramatically with her snowy skin. The only colour in the tableau was her hair, scarlet and spiky. The jaded businessmen perked up, they could see that Teddie was a different class of dancer; feel that she was a different class of person. James sat, back pressed against the bar, his eyes seeing nothing but the object of his desire, his gimlet gaze cutting through the smoke.
“We move like cagey tigers”
Teddie began to move to the music, her petite body filling the stage, her presence washing out across the patrons. She strutted, she posed, she made love to every person in the room. James sat, scarcely breathing, watching the tiny dancer giving herself to all of the uncaring suits in the room; and he hated her for it. He hated her ... and yet he loved her.
First Teddie peeled her top from her lithe body, exaggerating her movements and creating beautiful pale curves against the blackness that surrounded her. She had a true dancers body, slim and muscular, and yet soft and smooth. She was nothing like the other girls in the show, who seemed to have simply walked in off of the street at random and decided that this was a good place to exhibit their fleshy wares. Next the skin-tight mini was rolled down over hips and slid down across the fishnet hold-up stockings. With a flourish Teddie kicked the skirt to the side of the stage. She was now prancing around the boards in just her skimpy black underwear and heels; her pale skin glowing in the stage lights. Around the club one could almost hear the heavy breathing of the patrons, not a soul was moving, not a drink was being drunk. In a flowing move Teddie unhooked her bra and flung it to the side, revealing her pert breasts, each tipped with a delicate pink nipple, each enhanced by a shiny steel ring.
As James watched, his fingernails cut into the palms of his hands; he was torn completely in two. Aroused at seeing the love of his life, so proud and sleek; pulse pounding in his temple at the thought of the masturbatory fantasies that she was fuelling in the grey suited drones.
“We’re so wonderfully wonderfully wonderfully wonderfully pretty!”
Teddie pulled the bow at her hip and the silky black scrap fell fluttering to the floor. She stood, defiantly proud, the light turning her skin to living alabaster, a single sparkle of jewellery, hidden between inviting thighs, highlighting the fact that her body was made smooth for the delectation of all. She stood, her body only slightly moving with the song, no dance, no crass display was needed, her perfectly formed beauty was enough.
The song wound to a close “I love you ... let’s go” and the stage went dark.
The silence lingered for a moment as the crowd drew a collective breath, then the tension cracked and the club exploded with applause, the patrons knew that they had received something beyond a striptease, they had been given something that was at once pure while being suffused with a raw sensuality.
James, no reason to remain, stood and walked stiffly to the door. Without looking back he stepped out into the darkness of the night.
Teddie, now in her street clothes, waved farewell to the other dancers and, wrapping her thin coat around herself, slipped out of the back door and into the alleyway. It had rained earlier and the puddles reflected the stars, bringing some magic to the darkness. As she walked, her heels clicked against the concrete. Up ahead a shadowy form stepped out.
James, his voice cracking with emotion, croaked “I love you ... let’s go”
Author notes
Challenge Story about Teddie
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Magnificent!
Holy Shindig~ Wonderful weaving of words for Your story and Kudos for being able to bring the reader
right there
I even had my camera ready
I normally don't write in story form so I almost
paid someone to write it for me
j/k -tip toes out-
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Best wishes to You
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Thanks a lot for your comment. I'm glad that you liked it
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fantastic write, and you definately gave Teddie justice, even though she wasnt even the main character..
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Thanks a lot,
It depends upon your point of view I suppose
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Great write. The way you described the dancers was very suggestively erotic. Keep up the great work.
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Thank you Arzab,
Now I just have to arrange a trip for Myself and My pet to the local lapdance club
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Your Score
Presentation..........................20
Spelling, punctuation.................20
originality...........................20
How well you handled challenge........20
overall...............................20
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This story is amazing. I loved the background as well. But, the way you presented this, was very erotic. Great job, you have again, brought your best to the table for us to read.
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Thanks a lot for the praise and thanks for the 100% score!!!
I enjoyed writing this
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wow i loved the background its great but it could have been totally blank and that story would still have kept us all totally enthralled till the last word was read... you have done Teddie Justice and more with this write... good luck in the challenge... i loved this
cheers
Jen
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Thank you very much for your kind words Jen.
Tatt
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oh crap!!! This could go either way ... (although i do so hope it goes the interesting way ) but knowing You the way i know You, i can bet there will be a twist to THIS one if You choose to write another chapter
Well done Master ... excellent write (as always) You make use of the English language ... oh wait, maybe that's because You ARE English!
Forever in Your service,
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Thank you very much for the praise
Yes, I left it ambiguous on purpose.
Who knows, I may write some more (if I EVER get time!!!)
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oh and i adore the background ... ~sigh~ seriously, W/we HAVE TO go there!!!! please??? ~looking at You from under my eyelashes~
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W/we can go to Teazers one day soon
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thank You
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