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Softened Socks Left for the Dead

Spit into the friend
old places
kept from ground

All-weight
burdens former consequence
into shape

Lettered
the whitened widow
touches a rose.

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  • Deindichter
    August 14, 2007

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    This is a cool poem, I typically try and add caesura or dramatic pause to the poem, just to allow for the poem to be read exactly as the poet would prescribe. The images are well done and abstracted which was definitely a winner for me, I especially enjoy the second stanza. meter whether inadvertently or otherwise was interesting,
    5,3,3
    2,7,3
    2,5,4

    I was thinking you might have been trying for an concrete senyru, but syllabically that wouldn't add up, either way, very artsy and creative endeavor here friend.