now women are like transistors
and men are just like tubes
and women can be like sisters
and men will act like boobs
men are simple, women complex
women see men as big red necks
men are simple
men are simple
men see women as sex objects
so now women are transistors
girls are multitasking
being smarter than the misters
thank you just for asking
women are true and love their man
loving him, as much as she can
women are true
women are true
it’s been this way since time began
here’s the reason, men are like tubes
they will forget her mind
talk to her heart but watch her boobs
thinking of her behind
men can’t devote their heart to one
they’ll run around and just have fun
men can’t devote
men can’t devote
I still love that son of a gun
Author notes
Prompt: write how men are different than women.
Trijan Refrain
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:
Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 syllables of line five /c
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A contest entry
- a VERY easy 300 points make me laugh or even just warm my heart by Saosin.
300 points, ended November 2, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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We are iresistable are we not? This is very good and it is cute. I got a nice chuckle but enjoyed the mastery you had over this form
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HE HE HE HE you have penned absolute truth here, I just love it, you pen may once again be dipped in gold methinks
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men can’t devote,
they'd rather cavort
Going to a resort,
Leering on the courts
They'd rather make sport
Of one's who are short,
While swilling some port.
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Liked the satire in this piece. The image of the cliche man, put in a non-cliche poem format. A tad bit of irony, if you think about it enough. I loved the last line, it was, in a sad way, funny.
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Funny write, but also a bit of truth to it, too. This reminds me of a quote I once heard, but I forget who said it. That a woman wants one man to fulfill her every need, but a man wants every woman to fulfill his one need. Kind of sad how society is. Best of luck in the contest.
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whimsical satire
lovely funny satire , a look into the nature of men and women...made me smile..as one commentator exclaimed..lol tubes have more wallop than transistors, but then transistors are more modern in thought...tubes get old and dim, transistors have evolved into intigrated circuits lol...
that little tube likes it simple but strays off as it weakens lol ....forgetting what it was there for..
while the trusty transistor lasts forever ..
the tube likes the umpa,the transistor keeps its beat.
so does the heart.
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Right on my little one...you tell um' this is very good! I just love the beat and the way the words just jumped together like they did Just cant help but love them tho
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Magnificent!!
Is that why there is the term:
Boob Tube
You broke this down more than nicely and
me likes it
Oooooooooooooooooh Yes!!!
I was tapping my feet with this beat
Beautiful form and You just brought
so many images to my Mind~
-twitches-
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Me, I love the idea of two transistors in parallel! But then I would, wouldn't I!
Dang, I wouldn't even know where to put a tube! (I'm glad to say)
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Bullcrap! Everyone who knows anything about music knows that tube amps sound amazing and are much more sought after than transistor amps. The old Macintosh tube amps sell for far more than their original prices! There are no transistor amps that increase in value due to their performance. So, even if your poem is correct, your metaphor is incompletely laid out and the truth has to be put into this comment. Tubes are superior to transistors.
Three bunnies for such a good use of word, form and image. It's not your fault you are a transistor. I forgive you.
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MEN!!!!
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Oh my ... this was fantastic ... I so agree with you lol ... they usually only have one thing on their mind ... but no matter what ... we still love them ... lol ... bunch'a punks ... but you did very well on this ... I am honored to have read such a delightful write ... It was simply amazing and so powerful in it's words ... you have such a talent for form poetry ... and I just love it ... I wish I could write form poetry better ... but was never good at it ... you are amazing ... and this was hilarious and so true at the same time ... maybe that's why it was hilarious ... because of the truth ... lol .. I dont know ... I just know it was great ... thank you so much for your entry and good luck in the contest ... Much Love ... Sparkeh
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LOL, well done hon, this was cute, and a little too true for my liking! Best of luck in the contest...Scott
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