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dawn

orange butterfly glides
happily through the field
as sunrise begins its rest
and the dawn settles in.

lighthearted melody
enchanting structure
seeking contemporary composure;
second avenue on summer's eve.

this is just minor peices of homework assignments i am doing. so if it doesnt make sense, dont mind it.

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  • twinkling of an eye
    August 19, 2007

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    Oh, this is so charming! "As sunrise begins its rest
    and the dawn settles in." This has GOT to be one of the best lines I've ever read... Amazing image!


  • freespirit51
    August 8, 2007

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    Beautiful and calming words you have written in this piece.

    orange butterfly glides
    happily through the field
    as sunrise begins its rest
    and the dawn settles in.

    This verse is my favorite part. So very descriptive.

  • soulfultia gold member
    August 8, 2007
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    Your imagery left me feeling the tone of the day had changed from spirited travel, to rest and relaxation, inhaling the day... I enjoyed this piece, if it is not complete...please send me a link when it is and I would be curious to see what you change actually. ~Tia


    • Summer Dawn
      August 8, 2007
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      yeah, this is not persay, finished. its jsut jotted down episodes from a poetry class i have joined, and decided to post them here. more to come later fromt he class. i'm kinda wingin it there too. they never say if or what you are doing wroing or right, they just give points. sometimes it can be agrivating, but i['m going with the flow, ya know. have a good nite. gotta look for a $%^&^&* job tomorrow. got laid off. ahhh well. tisk tisk. take care.