dust made me shades
darker,
closer to pretty
walking past angels, I stayed mute
but called out to them with every inhale;
feeling like I should bow down.
I wanted to join their humble ranks, and they
would have let me
had I
asked. Stuttering
in my ignorance, I walked on with dirty feet.
But she stopped me with tiny wrists and black hair
and crowned me a companion,
a doctor,
a sister.
A mother.
Her smile cuts into my sleeping and I feel her tears
in my eyes
soiling through my skin the way she waved
and the way she hardly talked
in words.
Author notes
CarCrashHumor
Sucely is a 9-year-old angel from guatemala...
and probably the most amazing person I've ever met.
She was quiet (which was good for me because I don't speak spanish too well) and seemed shy, but she was so loving and accepting in her actions.
I decided to sponsor her and we write, but it's not the same as being there.
http://img72.imageshack.us/img72/3924/10005781eg6.jpg
http://img128.imageshack.us/img128/9263/10005541pk0.jpg
^sucely, her brother Edwin, and my nose.
http://img338.imageshack.us/img338/1280/img0191wi1.jpg
so this is about missing her and all of Guatemala
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soiling through my skin the way she waved
and the way she hardly talked
in words.
Well you are a light to me through her and yes through you too..a wonderful write is here..God bless you always..take care ...
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thank you. :]
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Darling... I just don't know where I would be without you. You write about angels when here I am reading from one. You're words are divine and I can see from this poem that your heart is as well, it's the most beautiful shade of gold.
I loved the ending of this piece. It was so beautiful. goddd I can't explain it but it was dazzling, incredible.
I think that you should give this to her, I'm sure that she would love it
all my love
PS. I love the first and last picture of the two of you, gawjus ♥
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I'm so glad you liked it.... I was struggling with this piece at first... because I wanted to write lots of sections about the general topic of missing friends. I had about 7 sections, but it wasn't flowing at all.
so I started over with this.
♥
i love you!!
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wow, this is an amazing poem. TRULY. ♥
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Awww this is sooo sweet!! I love it and you and Sucely look beautiful together. So I'm taking it you're with the guy who left to be there in Guatemala? Lol, You're a beautiful person inside and out. =]
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thanks bby! <3
hmmm well actually I'm with [kinda-ish] a guy who's in Venezuela... I liked the guatemalan boy soo much.. but I only knew him for a week....
so it was pretty wishful thinking haha. we e-mail every once in a while... v_v
and now I have neither.. because nelson had to move back after the year he spent here at my school. I was best friends with him all year... and then like just at the end we started being more. horrible timing.. but we talk on the phone a lot [or when he's not working that is..] and he's trying to visit me a lot.
but yeah it kinda sucks.
haha you must think I'm really fickle.
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I don't think you fickle. I think you're trying to find the right one for you.Lol. =] Best of luck with that.
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