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Warm Yes






I tried to hold

her exhalations

as they drifted

across my shoulder,

tried to reach around

to touch her warm yes

blown into my ear -

maybe it was illusion.

Maybe she was fading

before my eyes,

death in garters and stilettos.

Fuck me,

I am groaning grinding ghosting

into the cavity that once held her

and the confusing mixture of

her breasts, her yes, her lips, her no.

I do,

I have to have the rounded edges

of this woman against me.






 

 

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  • Nam
    October 21, 2007

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    I think the main problem I had with this poem was the "groaning grinding..." line. Not the words themselves, of course but the way the line reads, I think that was my main problem. I would have commented then but after two days of reading really bad poems between two contests, I just gave up on commenting on this particular contest that you entered this in.

    But, I liked the rest. And on a separate note: anonymous for us lowly members on the bottom doesn't really matter when it comes to your poems, they are all the similar to each other.


  • poet girl
    August 27, 2007
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    Very warm and beautiful. I melted into it.


  • jantastic gold member
    August 4, 2007
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    well then...


  • Abscessed
    August 3, 2007
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    wonderful!


  • Lute
    August 2, 2007
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    Resistance is futile


  • Cherokee
    August 2, 2007
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    That's good. I would've liked sighs in place of exhalations but that's just me. sexier


  • Night Hope gold member
    August 2, 2007

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    "I do,
    I have to have the rounded edges
    of this woman against me."

    I'm not sure which one of you is more fortunate, my Friend. Whatta penning this is, Scribe. Good luck in Melissa's contest. Wanda


  • joleahe
    August 2, 2007
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    WOW! this is amazing! such wonderful imagery! great job!

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