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[ Dearly Beloved ]

Dearly Beloved
we are gathered here today
to say goodbye to our childhood days.

No more homework, no more books
and no more of the teachers ugly looks.

Onward to Adulthood, how hard it
looks to me. We have to devise
some plan to stop this immediately.

Dearly Beloved,
We are gathered here today
To confess all the things we
did wrong for we all have to pay..

I didn't mean to push the cat off
the roof i swear! Oh and I'm sorry
for spending $100 at 'Build-A-Bear'

Remember that time when i told you
she 'tripped'? Well the truth is I poured
water on the ground to make her..uh slip?

Dearly Beloved,
We are gathered here today
To appreciate the ones who
made us this way.

Mom, Dad. I love you, i really do.
But would you mind if i stole that
baby picture of me with my mouth

spewing out food?

Sis, it pains me to say this so much
But you did help me when times get rough.

Except that one time you hid all my stuff!

Dearly Beloved,
We are gathered here today
To put to rest the good ol' days.

Author notes

hm writing this made me giggle maybe it will do the same to you Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious

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  • Ishtar
    November 22, 2007
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    this poem doesn't belong in this contest.
    read the bloody rules.
    thank you.


  • kirbysman Moderators member
    November 12, 2007
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    Thanks for entering the contest and good luck.

    Paul


  • Ray Von
    August 26, 2007

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    This lacks in strength even though the end was good. It was enjoyable enough though. Thank you for entering this sweet poem.
    Maria


  • MotherMachineGunn
    August 21, 2007

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    How ironic that it should fit so wonderfully. but I am not accepting pre-writes. Thank you for sharing this though. It was a wonderful read, full of imagery. Best of Luck

    ~MotherMachineGunn~


  • Lauren Noir
    August 18, 2007

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    This made me smile
    The little touches were great

    When I first read it I was thinking it would be depressing but the way it eased into personal experience and going through things we all feel, it really worked

    I laughed out loud at some bits
    And always had a smile

    Most of this kind of poem is sad and mournful, but this put a bright light on the past


    Thanks for entering
    And good luck


  • Beanbiscuit
    August 17, 2007

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    The pen of maturity and sincerity has created a memorable souvenir of the precious childhood innocence.
    Great write.


  • McRae by nature
    August 16, 2007

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    This was really neat. It did make me giggle. I needed it to. Some of these pieces are really dark and heartbreaking. It is nice to get a humorous one Thanks

    Carrie


  • badddgirl
    August 6, 2007
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    Thats funny!

    Ok I will keep this in my contest, just because its so cute.
    Thanks for entering!


  • tawk gold member
    August 5, 2007
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    Back for a second look, I really love this, so unique and the flow and rhythm are wonderful


  • Hecate616
    August 3, 2007
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    It did thank you for entering!


  • xCandieKissesx
    August 3, 2007

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    Nice work in this one. I just dont know what option you chose. Good imagery. Bravo! Good luck in the contest!
    Jackie ♥

  • tawk gold member
    August 2, 2007

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    This is such a unique write!! I just love it Rhythm an flow are excellent!! Wonderful emotion throughout

    Good luck and thanks for entering

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