Giggle, laugh, smile
Because you know.
Tomorrow you wont be
Tomorrow the rush will be gone
Embrace the pain
Because you know
Tomorrow you'll be ashamed
Tomorrow the pain will be gone
Smiles
Because you know
Tomorrow you'll be crying
Tomorrow reality will come back
But for tonight
Relish the pain
Relish the freedom
Smile again
Author notes
This was written a very long time ago, during my "bad period." It's about cutting and the feelings that come after it. It's an addiction, you cut, and feel so happy, free, wonderful. But tomorrow you'll feel ashamed, regret and cowardly what what you've done to yourself.
Hopefully this is what you're expecting in the contest. I looked through all of my cutting and darker poems and this one seemed to fit the best.
CA
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A contest entry
- The ribbon on my wrist says do not open before christmas. by Jaffa-.
500 points, ended December 25, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you for the great poem. I really enjoyed it, the explanation of feeling was very well done. I really liked the idea of what the poem was about. About being happy then ashamed and it being like a never ending cycle. So i guess this means that you'll never really feel any better if your life carrys on the same. Thank you for this, it was very meaningful and your in my finalists list
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This didn't seem to speak to me much but that is not necessarily a bad thing since to each his own. Keep that pen handy dear poet!
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Very well written.
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Really great emotions here. It sounds like a one-night stand to me...could be wrong though.
I think you did a great job expressing that feeling that some people go through, when they do something they know they will regret later.
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Ummm, It's actually written about cutting... sure it feels really good but tomorrow the shame of doing it comes to haunt you...
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Powerful emotions here, I can sort of relate in a way. It is the hardest thing to get through an emotional period in your life, you need to find some way to escape, and sometimes it may not be what others view as the best ways, but for someone who feels pain, whatever way can make them escape the reality of dealing with their own personal demons, then that is what they choose. I felt this way once before, but my inner guidance told me that if I removed myself from the root of the pain, I could move on to better things. When we have emotional scars, the outer ones don't matter to us, it is an escape, people ask questions, but we cover it up with escuses. Such an emotional write, and I wish you all the best through your pain. May you come through this, and find your inner guide to be strong, and be able to face the pain, but mainly I wish for you, peace within your heart, and no longer a need to cut yourself. Scars do last forever, even if they are only in our hearts.
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Well, I suppose feeling bad for cutting is a good thing? It shows you seem to think you're better then that, so you feel bad about what you did.
Either way, this was expressed with some true emotion and I thoroughly enjoyed it because of that.
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I hope you get happier, Raven. I feel for you. I hope you get over your depression and live a happy life. Continue with the extremely well written stuff, and vent your anger from these poems, and you'll be better.
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Dayum!
* lets out a looooooooooooooooooooong low whsitle * Dayum sis! I really can not say more than dayum! you just let yourself go in this poem and didn't hold back. I LOVE IT! Haha! this is one helluva wickedly penned poem. the wording is so intense and the over all depth and uniqueness to the poem is great. I really liked this and the style and sophiscated way you wrote and posted this. excellent job and keep up the good work
Bro
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Interesting way to write on this topic, accept the craving tonight, tomorrow expect the shame. If you hold out though this tomorrow doesn't come. I hope you get stronger, this is a hard thing to overcome but much worth it when you do.
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this is good,
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hey sweety
your poems are getting really good
i wish u wernt depressed tho but i know it will be ok
love you always
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Darling, I think that your poetry is really evolving and improving in leaps and bounds but I wish that you weren't so unhappy. I know how it feels to be depressed and it's not a fun ride, not at all. But all I can hope is that your writing helps to heal you, even if each poem your write only helps you temporarily because you can always write another and then another...
I waffle you scruffles, you don't deserve to be unhappy. This is a great poem written by an amazing poet and friend. I really do love you hun.
Bandaid.
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