Lost are the sacrificed souls of the past,
Buried inside yourself; hidden by lies,
Revolution is near, but will it last.
As to many this comes as a surprise.
Rebelling against your life of routine,
Running forever free-is this a dream?
But can you forget all that you have seen?
As the night falls the moon still hears you scream.
A contest entry
- In The Soul by whatever666.
600 points, ended April 15, 2008, 35 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite Plethora by TheDemonEve.
1100 points, ended May 30, 2008, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Bold, dark, and biting. The truth stings sometimes, but your talent as a writer sweetens this piece to the poet's eye. I especially liked the last two lines. Wonderful feeling, this is a great piece.
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i love it
sometimes the truth hurts other times its like your write. -
You use and sustain such a strong tone throughout the poem and it really adds what is a magnificent piece. Thank you
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Rebelling against your life of routine.... interesting write.
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dark, deep, excellent
You are a real;ly good writer! I mean, seriously!
WoW! I loved it, and I'm afraid I don't have words to tell you how amazingly the last two lines were delivered. Excellent.
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Thankyou
You can add me as a favourite if want to.
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Great Writing
Brilliant writing. Keep it up. The flow and layout are superb. This piece is quite sad and dark too. It is also deep and comes from the heart. You are gifted, keep writing.
All the best
Wayne
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Sweet :]!!!
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♥--T.R
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