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Life

Life

Dark
abyss
mindless fears.
Melancholic
tears sting fragile cheeks.
New pain, breaks hearts, love hurts,
relinquishing happiness.
Warmth dissipates, frozen desert,
emotional wasteland, lifeless, numb.
beseeching release, welcoming slow death

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  • Swan song gold member
    April 23
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    powerful dark peice man hit me hard here Well done


  • Phed
    October 23, 2007

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    I read this a while back! I'm sorry you were going through such a hard time. I hope everything is better now.

    This poem have such an incredible sense of vulnerability. Well written


  • T-Dizzle Mcnizzle
    August 23, 2007
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    I really like how you put this piece together.It is very well thought out..


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    August 19, 2007

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    Deep and very Emotional

    My Sister this is deep and very very emotional. I love the form of this piece. There is a lot of fear and darkness within this write. It feels cold and despair runs through it. It is wonderfully-written though. If this is how you feel Ang, I am here for you. I hope you know that, my Sister?

    Love always
    Your Bro
    Wayne
    xx


    • -Ang-
      August 19, 2007
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      Thank you my dearest Brother, this was written as part of a poetry assignment.

      I appreciate that you are here should i need.

      ang

  • poet43
    August 13, 2007

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    dark form ....

    ang, like ur form, looking good for the mood it stimulates. i see the passion that has gone into this ... thank you for inspiration ... see below ...

    Lifeless

    still, unmoving
    unknowing and losing
    all is not amusing
    dead to even musing

    poet43


  • myorama
    August 10, 2007
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    Wonderful imagery and use of vocabulary. Great to see you back on here.


  • Ami amour
    August 2, 2007

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    This is very well written I loved the use of language. Often I have found if a poem is written in this form it builds to beauty but you have used more and more words to express the end. Very well done. Ami


  • nunchaks
    August 2, 2007
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    Very Good

    At first when i read from the beginning i thought i wasnt going to enjoy, but when i went towards the end, i saw your style and began to make sense of it. I love the different use of vocabulary but all relating to the original meaning. My favourite words on this were: 'Warmth dissipates', 'emotional wasteland', 'beseeching release'. Well done.

    • -Ang-
      August 2, 2007
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      Thank you so much for stopping by and reading this, it is greatly appreciated , im busy learning new poetry styles at the moment so am playing around with words.

      once again, thank you

      ang

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