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- Spiritual Law without Disorder -

 

 

 

Calculated conscious stroked egos
with words of wisdom, regurgitated
from scraps of sediment
found in each person pillaged

especially the male population manipulated
to believe her beauty (surgical strategy)
came in groves where apples accumulated;
red, ripened and nutritious (temporary)
food for the Soul;

she worked to weave
through thoughts also exsanguinate slowly
their hearts

which showed predator to prey
on Life's Discovery Channel, damage controlled
to an extent by integration of intuition
instead of misguided assumption.

T
hird Eye binoculars brought the experience
in 3-D to my private residence where respect
surfaced between the lines along with love
for others as Light looked heavenly
compared to seeing Dark in mind's dungeon

with me, myself and I
on acquintance's forehead amidst freckles
and lines from lies to cover imperfections
littered dot to dot
and connected at each Scarlet Letter.

H
ow proud she was to imbed talons,
leave scratches from struggle
to subdue using sensuality advantageously
as her makeshift integrity infused doubts

yet years of observance
took its toll and taught my Spirit vigilance,
not to attach strings or strap others
into an electrical chair as charity
for greedy grotesque amusement
just to be nominated number one
with trail of victim's crimson coagulated.

P
assive inner voice, once a victim tagged
(listed in demon's database)
who believed her breath sweet

but witnessed infectious worm in center
was strangled, stripped and left on side of road
where Death (Ventriquilist) whispered:
I told you so-

as forgiveness found strength to say:
I realize now, you were right
all along.

Some sought to hire Hate,
others requested Revenge,
an alternative solution for me
was Karma

while the Libran scale balanced
with weight of evidence
b
efore bailiff
who returned verdict released- Guilty

P
unishment handed down to her-
self reflection as restitution
doing selfless community service
in Soul's soup kitchen.




Author notes

Required:
This week we want a mirrored poem.
You all will be given one heavenly virtue,
and one of the deadly sins.
You are to write a very personal piece this week.
Genre
Form

All of this is up to you.
I will not assign those, simply because
I want this to be very personal and very deep!

How you set this up as far as presentation will be up to you.
The most creative poet (my personal opinion)
will receive a bonus!!
Plus the top three will all get to join a contest
for extra points.

Here are your virtues and sins:


Desire: Pride/Justice

**Pride reflected heavily from an acquaintance
(no longer a close Friend)
who showed me what I needed to see
which brought forth Justice from actions
also helped keep scale balanced...
She breached our Friendship built~
the pain from deception
affected me personally-because I trusted
this person I had known physically
for many many years
and instead of reacting...
sent the negative energy packing...

Poetic Challenge: Season 5- Round 5
http://allpoetry.com/column/show/2337076


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  • wolfspiritguide gold member
    August 3, 2007
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  • Scarlet Ambrosia
    August 2, 2007

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    Des,

    This was absolutly amazing!!! I am absolutly stuuned with your wonderful talent, and of your way of ctrating such an amazing piece !!! thank you for shatin this wondeful piece

    Di


  • luckynsincere
    August 2, 2007

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    Desire.

    You blew me away! I have gone on and on with comments for this weeks challenge. I am honestly not sure exactly what to say.

    Do not take this lightly. There are not many that can make me just say: DAMNNNNNNNN!!!!


    lol.

    100.

    You are on top this week in my book sweety. Damn,,,
    damn
    damn
    damn

    you have left me seeking words--



    -slaps self to pull it together-


    lol


    wonderful work!


  • Arkbear gold member
    August 2, 2007

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    Damn Sissy!

    I did not expect you to take *Justice* in the avenue

    which you chose.....but Damn!

     

    I have said many times....*Bear counts on furry paws*

    ...ahhh...'bout 10 times.....that I just read one of your best works ~

     

    Well, this one is so frikkin good......I wanted

    to scream all the lines which hit HARD in

    this write.....and you probably would'e heard 'em,

    since you & I are so close.....but Damn!!

     

    You placed yourself right into this

    Soup bowl and mixed it up!

     

    .....and it wasn't a vegetarian soup either!

     

    You went for the juggler...I LOVED it!

     

    I zeroed in on the intesity of this entry....I saw heated

    emotions blazing from boiling Ink ~

     

    I saw you dig with a shovel of conviction

     and got to the heart of this

    festuring sore, and dug it right out and tossed

    it into your pile of waste ~

     

    I saw an entry which made me sit and go....Wow!

     

    Dip your Quill dear....it may need some cooling off after this!

     

    Very well done ~

     

    Presentation....a bit drab ~

     

    Grammatical choices...researched with your soul ~

     

    Flow....spun my furry head around!!!!

     

    Theme coverd......Splendid ~

     

    Best read thus far ~

     

    Bear ~

     

    Score:

     

    100

     

     

    ...plus another 20 for blowing my frikkin

    head off from excitement of such a creative

    and exciting entry and efforts which shine ~

     

    120


  • troyias
    August 2, 2007

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    Well Done

    Beautifully written and it catches the mind of the reader and pulls them in. the word choice is perfect and well used. the flow is rich and full of lush emotion. Well done.

    *Go with God* my frioend,

    Valerie


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    August 2, 2007

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    Oh this brings to mind..what a tangled web we do weave when first we practice to deceive..Awesome write with karma coming around full circle. Well done on talented one.

    Jeannie


  • StarEyes
    August 2, 2007

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    TAKE A BOW!!!

    This is more than fantastic!!! What a read you have here!! WOW!!! And I love how you described pride, sooo vividly!! Damn Girl! This is just amazing!! Best of luck in the challenge!

    and much love

    Nettie


  • penman gold member
    August 2, 2007

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    Wow!

    Oh my precious, simply stunning. Absolutely amazing. You expressed this nature of pride so vividly. Best of luck in the challenge.

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