A good cum can wipe away
The tears
The pain
The fears
To find a reprieve from the terrible feeling
As you open your bloodshot eyes to the ceiling
As love will try to tear you apart
Lust is there, with an eternal warm heart
We all need our moments of pleasure
To escape a mindful of pain, we need leisure
Don't worry, my dear,
Don't fret
There's no shame in getting
Your fingers wet
Author notes
Wrote this for Kitten
A lot of poetry comes from talking to her
Kind of a controversial poem.
Either people love it,
or are disgusted by it, and are passive aggressive about it.
On another site, Papertank, where people can vote on pieces, this got a score of -9 before anyone actually left a comment, and then it started rising drastically.
A contest entry
- Justification by Yunalonei.
800 points, ended May 19, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Good Job.
I really enjoyed this poem and i can understand (especially after the comments in the authors box) how it could be misconstrued.
People should loosen up more and feel free to speak about their sexuality more often.
It was well written and well thought through.
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It goes from deep thought of lonliness, and filling the void with lust; to a little smile in the lst four lines.
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"Don't worry, my dear,
Don't fret
There's no shame in getting
Your fingers wet"
Like this write here love. Very true if i do say so myself.
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true lol good job
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This is awkwardly fantastic. It's cute, it's true, and it's poetic all at the same time. Fantabulous job, and keep writing!
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this is fantastic, it's very well-written for one, and honestly, i generally can't stomach rhyming poems because the rhyme scheme can tend to overwhelm what is being expressed in the poem. the meter in this was fantastic, it flowed very well. i absolutely loved this, man.
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FAB
HAHAH
i utterly LOVED this poem
so so so true
Quirky, funny, erotic, nice rhyme scheme
loved the last stanza in particular
the rhyme from line 12- 14 was sublime
seriously i havent seen a poem that i actually enjoyed for a while now- and that was it XD
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Hard to ignore a title like that!
I like the sentiment, but the metre is too all over the place for me, but I approve of any and all erotic rhymers so I thank-you!
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omg
this poem super excited me
i can sadly relate hahhaha
i love it
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very good...
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Ok
ok poem i couldnt really understand where you were going with it. the words are well written. other than being hard to understand it was a good poem. the grammar and ryhme are very good. i recomend that you keep going in this direction. i think that your style of poetry has the ability to be great if you write more of what you truely feel inside. in conclusion i would like to say that this comment has gone on for far too long, awww hell you know im making it long for the points, but at least i read your poem first, keep it goin -
this poem was very well thought out. i liked it. you have your own stlye and i hope to read more of your work.
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nice
that was good... the last two lines were the kicker! great job! -
loved it very frank and truthful no one coulda said it better
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nice!
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EXCELLENT
A very frank admission of absolute truth which various kinds of inhibitions do not allow us to express and how very poetically it has been expressed here by the poet! A little gem I enjoyed it very much. -
wow - - - - what an intriguing opener. I bet you got alot of
with that one. Very interesting and compelling piece.
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haha! loved it! sounding kinda s&m-ish but hey everyone loves that right!
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nice poem
you have a good talent i liked this poem it was funny and it had a point to great job hope you write more like this you gave me a good chuckkle thanks again.
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Ha, this is funny. Has some memorable lines, good poetry, and the last stanza seems so soft and warmhearted you wouldn't believe it's a humor poem.
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sweetness
oh gosh, that was fun. I looove the last stanza, it just plain gave me the giggles. Rock on that was great.
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hahaa this makes me laugh its very good
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wow
that was honestly one of the best things ive read -
very well written
and content is great as well
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a good cum can fix any thing, at lest for a little while
it will make you smile it will make you feel better
yes oh yes
good poem
~~Chef W.B.
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When I 1st started reading, I was thinking, "This isn't funny, it's actually a pretty well-written piece of erotica!" Then the punchline! Hilarious! Way to go, great job, and so on and so on! Very good.
~*DJ*~
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this is a unique approach. heh. and with such wit. the thing that attracts me to this poem is its truth. we could all use a good lay once and a while... when love gets us down what do we do. cum. brilliant.
Cheers.
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thanks for the influance
truely inspiring the way you used your wonds was great so was the way you ryned so much. let blissings be bestowed upon you and your gift. -
"Don't worry, my dear,
Don't fret
There's no shame in getting
Your fingers wet"
When I read this I got a good chuckle out of it - nicely written!!!
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Wow, a lot of feeling in this... I agree, a good cum can relieve a lot. I really like how this is written too, great job!
~Alix -
lust is everywhere-one of the few reasons to endure this cruel world!HERE'S TO PLEASURE!
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mindful
Two separate words ( mind full )
Not sure I like this, but hey whatever floats your boat is cool with me
Becky -
"Don't worry, my dear,
Don't fret
There's no shame in getting
Your fingers wet"
This my quote of the day! Loved your poem!
~Dommi -
ok...
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left me with a smile
oh how your so right... reminds me of lastnight
... anyways, oh yeah the poem... judging from the title i wouldnt have guessed this to have any real, depth i guess... but i was wrong... i cant quite put it into words but theres something about this poem thats got me thinking about a darker undertone... anyways overall great porn... i mean poem
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nice
yes this is true. sometime we get lost in finding love that we forget that we can have some fun. very nicely written. -
Fun
fun, playful, and very true! sexually fanciful and all that jazz. the humor is quite good too, with the rhyme scheme only enhancing it.
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This is unique, I like it very much. I thank you for sharing it and I hope to see more of your work in the future. I hope to see more of your work in the future
To find a reprieve from the terrible feeling
As you open your bloodshot eyes to the ceiling
As love will try to tear you apart
Lust is there, with an eternal warm heart
We all need our moments of pleasure
To escape a mindful of pain, we need leisure
Wow!!!
So lovely!!!
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LMAO @ the last verse... Hmmm. Wow. The title is what caught me, I was like "uhhh?", but as funny and as...wrong (lol)... as this is, it's probably pretty true, lol.
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HA, this is a humorous piece of penmenship, thanks for sharing it with us. I like your rhyme scheme,hope to see more =)
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This is quite amazing makes me feel a little angsty though . . . not that that's a bad thing. It came across to me that you were angry about something but an orgasm was able to get rid of that anger?
Very nice. thank you
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LOL
Okay, this is good in almost a twisted way. The title is so familiar yet so perfect. The last line is an nice punch-line. -
I enjoy sexual humor just as much as the next person. You done a really good job in writhing this. I don't really have much to say about this because due to my past I really don't enjoy lust without love behind it... but that's just one out of a million persons opinion. I wasn't trying to dis your work just then because I really really like your ability and it made me smile... because the people I have had sex with it has been decitfully pleasurable *devilish smile*! Congrats.
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LMAO.... This was just to funny... But OH so true!! I had to reread it several times.... Great job!!!
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This is definately different from what I'm used to read on here, but I actually do like this poem
You actually have proven that 'humour' and 'serious' are quite close together
Well written, I did enjoy this
Leander -
this poem shows you should be able to freely enjoy your body and not feel ashamed. Emotions can be released that way.
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lol
I like the way this piece seems to flow together... I found it to be really funny, while at the same time there is a sense of seriousness to it that makes me stop and say, "where am I in life?"
sorry this is so long... maybe I need to masturbate
(jk lol)
keep up the good work!
+++Itachi+++
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Oh, this is terrific!! I LOVE LOVE LOVE the ending, it made me smile.
If anyone ever tells me you can't make a poem about masturbation, I'll show them this one.
Great job.
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hehe.... this is very funny!! well at least it made me giggle!!
when i clicked i didnt know what i was getting into!!
but i like it!!
"Don't worry, my dear,
Don't fret
There's no shame in getting
Your fingers wet "
what a great way to end such a poem!! great write!!
--kat -
LOL!
This one made me giggle...very cute! I love the last line. To me it was unexpected which is why I think I enjoyed it so much. You are very right because a good cum can do all of those things and more. Nicely done!! Keep up the awesome work
~Jill
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I think you have nailed this one right out of the ballpark with all its depth and savory delights. Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use. 
♥ Touchof1der -
that's certainly true
and the title did make me want to read your poem. I like "There's no shame in getting your fingers wet". Interesting point -- it's not totally clear if you are by yourself or with someone else.
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this put a smile on my face, I like the in ya face humour, and it's true, broke hearts have nothing to do with horny limbs-it's a comfort thing.
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Oh my, very creative write indeed. Thanks for sharing your work, I did enjoy.
Jen -
very creative and unique indeed. I was not expecting the ending that you gave but it wasn't bad at all. Great write and thanks for sharing!
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This is good... quite unique...
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This makes me think I should come to you when I need cheering up... is that right? hmmm... nice ending! Meg
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nice and not so nice
I loved the form, and the descriptive qualities... but this had a very deep hint of sadness to it... and it made me horny, thus the nice and not so nice... great write!
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haha, i wasn't expecting it to end the way it did. It was a surprise but it worked, i really enjoyed it it was tied together very nicely.
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I love it. There is so much creativity and talent from this piece. Very well done.
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i think this is a great piece, fun, cheeky, but also kinda true! I love the ending so rude but not in a disgusting way, erotic but kind discreetly not using vulgar words and such. Brilliant!
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Superb
This is one of the most amusing poems I have ever read.
Extremely well done indeed, just as it is.
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um pleasure and leisure rhyme, but their kinda off. I think you ended the poem brilliantly. I a little to young to know that stuff but I take you for your word.
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Good work
I do think that great sex can help every mood... your poem have a nice sexual flow to it! loved that and the flow of the words... a smooth and even bounce, one more plus! good erotica! keep it up, looking forward to reading more...
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This is such a randomly-fun poem, it made me giggle. I love it, and keep up the funny and unique work!
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hmmm, this was a bit different but in a good way. I like reading poems like this. Thanks for sharing this
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I like erotic poetry that still maintains an edge. Looking at it I didn't think it would flow, but it did. I didn't think it would make me smile, but it did.
Long story short, I liked it.
Cheers,
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Oh wow...the last part was fantastic. A funny yet insightful rhyme. I think this expresses an idea that ought to be embraced more often, and discussed in the open even more often. Fantastic work
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I have no idea what to even say here. I guess you could say that you have left me speechless. Pen on poet!
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I'm not sure why I clicked this poem.
But never theless, Ok, poem! -
This seemed kind of "kiddie" to me. While very true in its subject matter, it could have been put together much better and presented with more maturity.
I thank you for sharing and please do keep writing.
Becky
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awesome
This poem basically puts the feelings i have about one night stands and typical sex and love into words that i couldnt use to describe it. awesome write. Kitten must be a great inspiration.
-Mejjan
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I know that this one is very true... And Ironically I needed to read this one today.... Thank you for a good read.....
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