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Oklahoma Dust


Chorus

I'm just Oklahoma dust
Covered now with bits of rust
Most my dreams have all gone bust
There's little left to trust
I'm just Oklahoma dust


Verse 1

I, like most, will never be
A soul who changes history
When I die will anybody care
Will they remember me


Verse 2

My hopes,dreams and all my schemes
Have vanished in the sands of time
And my life seems wasted looking back
It seems like such a crime


Chorus

I'm just Oklahoma dust
Covered now with bits of rust
Most my dreams have all gone bust
There's little left to trust
I'm just Oklahoma dust


Verse 3

If I'd been a wiser soul
I would have given of myself
If there are really any riches
Then friends would be my wealth


Verse 4

As it was I sacrificed
For silly trinkets and some toys
All of the things which really mattered
For superficial joys


Chorus

I'm just Oklahoma dust
Covered now with bits of rust
Most my dreams have all gone bust
There's little left to trust
I'm just Oklahoma dust

Author notes

Inspired by Dust In The Wind - Kansas

These are lyrics. I have played around with a melody, but I haven't settled on anything yet.

Andy

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Comments

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  • Wickedruby1 gold member
    May 25
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    Very good

    songs with our music are not as effective as they shoule be. These are good lyrics.Five


    • Andy Stephenson
      May 26
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      Hi Neve!

      I haven't done much song or poetry writing in the last four years. I've switched my focus to story and novel writing.

      Welcome to Allpoetry!

      At the bottom of the page are direct links to Allpoetry's sister sites. Your username and password work at all of the sites.

      I spend most of my time at Storywrite, one of our story sites. I check for messages at Allpoetry once a day, at least and then I go to Storywrite.

      Thanks very much for checking out some of my stuff at Allpoetry. If you happen over to Storywrite, you might check me out there.

      I'm glad you like these lyrics. I never have finished a melody to this song, but I've recently opened an account at GarageBand. I have only one song posted there, but soon I will post more.

      Andy


  • condor gold member
    October 17, 2008

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    fantastic lyrics that tell a sad but wonderful story. I do love that picture. Seems like it's been there for ever. I think this will be a great song once you have it all planned out. What type of music are you normally into anyway? Me, I'm old rock and country. Anyhow, this is great and will be bookmarked.


    • Andy Stephenson
      October 18, 2008
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      Hi Condor

      I haven't worked on a song in almost a year. Frankly, I'd forgotten about this one. I'm not really crazy about the chorus lyrics. I don't know if I'll work on this song again or not. If you'd like to hear some of my songs, I could send you a CD or you might be able to hear some at putfile.com/andystephenson/media if they haven't been deleted. I haven't checked it in some time.

      Andy


  • John Carney
    September 28, 2007

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    Looks good so far. I like the theme of the piece. It has a down home quality and appeals to the everyday person. Is this going to be country music or something else?

    John Carney


    • Andy Stephenson
      September 28, 2007
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      Thanks John

      Thanks again for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it. I don't think I am going to finish this song. I don't really feel like the lyrics are good enough to warrent developing a melody. If I had followed through with it, it would probably have been country music.

      Andy


  • abuyi
    August 8, 2007
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    beautiful song


    • Andy Stephenson
      August 8, 2007
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      Thanks Abdulla

      Thanks for reading, commenting and all the applause. I'm glad you like this song. I appreciate that you stopped by and read it.

      • abuyi
        August 9, 2007
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        it was a pleasure..plus i was happy to see u after such a long time in ap


  • suseann
    August 2, 2007

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    It matters not what mountains we scale, to what heights we do aspire.You can't take it with you to heaven or hell. And we're all just ashs of dusty fires.This was a great piece my friend. I can hear the dust in the wind blowing in unison here.


    • Andy Stephenson
      August 2, 2007
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      Thanks Suseann

      Thanks for reading, commenting and all the applause. I do appreciate it. It has been quite a while since I had written a poem or song. I'm very pleased that you like this one. I'm glad you could relate to these lyrics.

      Andy


  • requiempoet gold member
    August 1, 2007
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    Hey you're writing!!!! Hooray!!!! that's amazing I like it!!!


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    August 1, 2007

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    Absolutely wonderful...mirrored the sentiment of the original song...with new and fresh words! Thanks for sharing. Best of luck!!!
    Az


    • Andy Stephenson
      August 1, 2007
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      Thanks Aslyn

      I've added a picture from the Oklahoma Dust Bowl of an old relic. It seemed appropriate. Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I hope you have many great entries and much fun.

      Andy

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