In my dreams flies a
brutish black stallion pegasus...
Flying through the air like
mercy and unrelentless judgement...
Gray smoke that sparkles on its' edges
like pure tempered gold...
Flies swiftly to rescue me
from the abomination of desolation.!..
My legs are broken and the crowd relentless!!!
Rescued...Rescued...Rescued...
A deep breath and a deep sigh,
Piss in my pants makes me cry...
In my dreams
flies a black stallion pegasus
who rescues me.
A contest entry
- SUPERNATURAL SUPERSTARS...click meeeeeeeeeee by XInsanity-FairX.
800 points, ended August 8, 2007, 14 entries
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I remember this specific dream and the circumstances that you felt it represented at that time, but it's such an important symbol for you and has stayed with you a long time ... I can't help but read my own interpretations into it ... ie. savior figure who is both brutish and judgmental as well as merciful (a Christ-like mystical creature who is of the air and the earth and who can be depended on to rescue you from the taunting pain of life)... you've done such a great job here of translating that sense of despair and salvation ... and I just wonder how the symbols relate to you now
The Nosey One
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wow...it's very powerfull...so full of so many emotions...i gotta say though...'piss in my pants' did make me giggle...but thats just me being immature...good luck in the contest
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Intresting, you dont leave anything out, both the good and bad. Blun, which is what I like. Keep it up!!!
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