.midnight.
people
run to catch their
downtown trains I
think they are a little late and
I don't know what it is
I want to run from
.moonlight.
people
outstretch tongues for
springtime rain I
stand to watch puddles form and
I'm not sure what it is
I want to run from
.tonight.
people
all hold hands and
look the same they
explain happiness with smiles and
I'm not sure where it is
I want to run to
.tomorrow night.
people
stare at the boy who
sits aflame
they're glad I don't
look their way and
I'm not sure where it is
I thought I'd run to
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Written September 5th, 2003
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I like this. It is cleverly built and simple, but in that simplicity there seems to be a deep message and much emotion.
~Diana -
okay, i'm not an expert but your sentence in each stanza ends a little different than what i'm used to but if that's how u write thats how u write. all in all great poem, i guess everyone is running from something!!!
always
shanna -
I'm not going to even pretend that I know you in the slightest. I'm smarter than that. However, I always regarded you as one of the most intelligent people I've ever know. For this reason, it's an abstract idea for you to admit that you don't know something. Especially about yourself.
I always thought you knew everything; including what you were thinking, and why you were thinking it. It's refreshing, Zak, to see that sometimes, you're just as lost as the rest of us.
-Victoria -
Very interesting write. I think a lot of people feel like they are running from something.....but what?
very nice write.
Sam
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"stand to watch puddles form" That is a great line. I can understand the feeling. I can understand what you are trying (and succeeding) to say. Thanks. Running would feel so good, if only there was somewhere better to go.
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