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"Don't Let Go"

One last embrace, before you go ...
 
This time together went so fast. 
 
 
I will hold you every moment
 
deep within my heart. 
 
 
I promise to write you everyday.
 
 
  Go now my love,
 
you have a job to do ...
 
Be Safe,
 
Be Strong,
 
Be swift in all that's ahead of you. 
 
 
Remember this moment,
 
let our love guide you through. 
 
 
I'll be back here waiting for you. 
 
 
Do not fear for me,
 
I'll be alright.
 
 
  Though my dear,
 
I will surely miss you
 
with each day that shall pass. 
 
 
Till then,
 
take my locket hold it close. 
 
 
May it give you strength,
 
a reason to go on
 
when doubt prays on your mind. 
 
 
I pray the love of my heart will shelter you,
 
keep you safe from harm. 
 
 
Please come home soon ...
 
for our life together
 
has just now begun. 
 
 
There is so much ahead of us,
 
so much we have yet to do.

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  • crivanea silver member
    October 28, 2007

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    i like it..but i don't like it...lol..i love the way u wrote this..the style is very unique..u express thoughts and words in simpe phases...pray the love of my heart will shelter you,

    keep you safe from harm.

    very cliche line..but so wisely put...

    Though my dear,

    I will surely miss you

    with each day that shall pass.

    very endearing thoughts..very romantic..

    this poem is not my style..perhaps that's y i judge it poorly..but the poem itself is nicely written..very sound in stucture..and definetly a good use of words..


  • SignifyingNothing
    October 27, 2007

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    Beautifully expressed. This poem is universal in that we all feel this way when a loved one has to leave...I got the impression of a soldier going off to war, but it could just as easily apply to other situations.


  • UnchartedPoet
    October 24, 2007

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    Beautiful and magical, my heart breaks too. Great write and thanks for sharing your work.

    Jen


  • Touchof1der silver member
    October 23, 2007

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    Your emotions flow in gentle ripples to delicately caress the mind of the reader and send them adrift upon your images effortlessly. Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use.
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • Sanguinarius
    October 15, 2007
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    Very beautiful piece , written for one loved very much , no doubt. Very well done ~Bret~


  • tealover1991
    October 14, 2007
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    That was absolutely heart felt and quite divinely written.

  • L000
    October 11, 2007

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    awww it really tugs at your heart strings . the background works well with the classy picture you chose . The last two lines are very mature and sensible , something a lot of peoples love lack .

    great piece thanks so much for sharing , i really enjoyed reading it .

    ~glass fingers~


  • nima45
    October 10, 2007

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    Lovely

    Wow!I just love this part, "Remember this moment, let our love guide you through.I'll be back here waiting for you." and when you say,"This time together went so fast." This sentence is beautifully written and it made me remember the days with my Love.

  • nima45
    October 10, 2007
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    Lovely

    Wow!I just love this part, "Remember this moment, let our love guide you through.I'll be back here waiting for you." and when you say,"This time together went so fast." This sentence is beautifully written and it made me remember the days with my Love.


  • kooleyes
    October 9, 2007

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    This is a beautiful work of art. Your imagery is awesome. Your choice of words are outstanding.
    take my locket hold it close.


    May it give you strength,

    a reason to go on

    when doubt prays on your mind.


    I pray the love of my heart will shelter you,

    keep you safe from harm.
    These lines are breath taking. So full of emotions that i wanted to cry for them. Thanks for the read and keep on writing


  • Beautiful-N-Broken gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    This is a very heart-warming write that shows the love and pain of a woman missing her soldier. It is so close to my heart. This is an excellent write! Thank you for sharing.


  • warrior-eagle
    October 5, 2007

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    I'll be back here waiting for you.


    Do not fear for me,

    I'll be alright.
    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
    Wow,the emotion here is palpable.
    Great poem here.


  • yourhot21
    October 4, 2007
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    This was such a sweet poem! I liked it a lot. Amazing job!


  • Angel Of Heaven99
    October 4, 2007

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    Beautiful and absolutely heart wrenching. For someone you love so much to have to go away is the hardest thing to endure and the love pours out in this poem. Beautifully written


  • laugh at me
    October 2, 2007
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    Wow, this is a beautiful poem


  • Midnight Lace
    September 29, 2007

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    I am so in love with this image and your words just fit the whole scene well. This is really fantastic. Thank you for sharing.
    midnight lace


  • Prinzessin Lilliana
    September 29, 2007

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    Soo Romantic!

    I was in da mood for something romantic and ur poem was perfect Sounded like it was written right from the heart.It also ended on a happy thought,the thought of re-union and a future that would hold them together ever after.I really enjoyed reading it.Keep on writing


  • Silly Rabbit.
    September 28, 2007

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    Beautiful.. I can feel how hard it is to let go, yet knowing you have to. Very touching, deep and emotional. I love it. Keep up the good work.


  • H4rd Kisses
    September 24, 2007

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    Such a beautifully written romantic poem. It really makes the reader feel for your character. Good job on this. And the background and picture go together well, it really adds to the overall tone of the poem


  • Arrianna MacEwan
    September 23, 2007

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    Such a breathtaking piece. It hit home for me. My Husband will be leaving for his second tour of Duty in Iraq in just a few short weeks. We have only been married for Three.

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    September 8, 2007

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    Breathtaking, what a beautiful dedication... the words of love truly do jump from the screen and envelop the reader.. thank you for sharing a little piece of yourself

    Karen


  • GoodKnightPoet
    August 29, 2007

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    What can I say that hasn't already been said. This is a great poem. I enjoyed it so much. Your words really touched me. Love should always shelter.


  • CountryCousin
    August 1, 2007

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    Beautiful.

    This is really written well and is a message for all time. This is one that I enjoyed from the opening line to the last line and is worth reading again.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    August 1, 2007

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    Lovely

    Spoken as a woman in love would speak to her new husband just headed out to war with a locket in hand for the times he needs her near she will know and whisper only for his ears I am waiting so do what you need to do then come back home


  • Janetheplain
    August 1, 2007

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    Sweet

    Awww....this about broke my heart. You express your love here so sincerely. And even though you are apart he'll be with you in your heart! Beautiful job, Jane

    My fave lines:

    Though my dear,

    I will surely miss you

    with each day that shall pass.


    Till then,

    take my locket hold it close.

    BRAVA!!

  • Acidanthra
    August 1, 2007

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    I like it!

    I absolutely love the imagery that you included, physical, emotional, and spiritual. I love using my mind's eye, and your words proved to me that it was well worth it.

    Emotions are my angels as well as my demons. I am an extreme emotional, empathetic person. This is why I love poetry so.

    You touched my emotional boundaries, which is great! Not many people can. All I can say is Kudos!!!!!

    Great Write!!!!

    Cith

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