With fickle heart
He turns into the arms of
Another
Leaving in his wake
My broken body
Bleeding
On the sand
Pausing
He turns back,
Arrogance glinting behind his
Facade,
And pours vinegar in my
Wounds.
As I scream
Against the
Pain
He grins
Proud of himself,
Kissing his next
Victim.
My emerald eyes now
Black irises
Empty
Cold
Unfeeling.
Truth lies next to me
Battered
By his powerful
Lies.
Waves lap at my stomach,
Washing over my open
Gashes,
Grinding rough salt
Into my flesh.
My blood mingles
With the harsh
Water
Turning it deep red,
Forcing the waves
To foam angrily
Against the
Intrusion.
With a laugh of pure
Enjoyment
And satisfaction,
The traitor grabs the hand
Of my
Replacement
And swims in my
Ocean of agony.
Author notes
We all go through breakups. that's not the worst part. it's when the person you love ends up in the arms of another when you know you're better for them.
A contest entry
- Don't Write Me A Love Song... by SoRrYhErLoT.
300 points, ended February 5, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Very nice. I felt a lot of emotion is this peice. Keep writting!
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This poem is AWESOME!!!!!!!!!! wow....you've really made this contest difficult...
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This was a very dark write. A lot of passion here. This poem read really well. I enjoyed it very much. Keep up the good writing.
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Woah. O-o;
Very vibrant. Very... Something. I can't think of the word. =/ Like vocal but when it comes to words.. I don't know. There's a lot of emotion in it. Especially pain. "Broken body, broken soul. A shattered heart that will never be whole." That popped into my head after reading this. Maybe it reflects it. lol -sighs- Anyways. I need some breakfast or something.. I just got up. =P
Good work, keep it up, kk? =D
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"The Traitor grabs the hand of my replacement and swims in my ocean of agony." amazing ending line, i loved it. just like always, you can feel pure, raw emotion just by looking at your poems. it's your true gift, one that not alot of people have.
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"Truth lies next to me
Battered
By his powerful
Lies."
These lines are wonderful, how you aren't the only one who suffers in a breakup like this, truth does as well. This entire poem is very strong and emotional, the impressive imagery and metaphors make it even more so. Dripping with angst and emotion, wonderfully written, I very much enjoyed reading this, just because of the strength of the writing and feeling.
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