A warriors cry
Is shattering the sky
Dark clouds roll in
We flee as the storm begins.
A thousand strong
no ground stays dry for long
the earth shakes in terror
Never have I seen such fervor
Time and again they come
Flying to the sound of a distant drum
Wave after wave crashes
Pouring salt in all these gashes
A single tree makes up the battleground
For this war void of sound.
Author notes
im working on it. its something important to me this is actually the second or third try to capture it
working on it
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I like the imagry you captureed in your peice, If your arent satisfied yet, Im sure the next will be lovely
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Very Interesting!
Very nice imagery, although I'm not sure I get the gist of this poem! The flow, sound and wording this poem is very good! Keep working on it! Good work!
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just birds...and trees
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I like the images this conjures and the many flights of fancy on which the mind may travel.
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there is a lot of power in this poem very deep personal emotion very good pen.
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cool...u like, having a mental breakdown or what?
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umm no it was just birds on trees.....but its something i see a lot and tend to get lost in watching them...as one takes off and they swarm a tree forcing the birds in that tree to retreat to a different tree...adn the way they do this territorial grabbing without ever attacking each other...its weird...idk haha maybe?
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whoa...this is really good. if you can possibly make it better than keep trying and keep me up dated it is an exceptionaly good write,
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I have all faith you will capture it perfectly.
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