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Just My Luck

Her face drops my jaw to the floor,
because I haven't seen such beauty before.
Her voice is like music to my ears.
She always laughs, even when the end of the world nears.
With her hands she can cure,
because her soul is pure.
My heart tells me she's the One,
'cause she shines brighter than the sun.

The truth crushed my dream
now reality reigns supreme.
It hurts, when I discover
that she already got a lover.
God bless him, for having a relation
with the perfect, living creation.

But my mind always reminds me
of this most excellent lady.
It feels like an obsession,
to give my life for someone else's possession.
I don't care how many times I get the angel's touch.
I always know that it will not mean much.

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  • Keith E. Gerber
    September 2
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    Well done

    I enjoyed this poem.Thank you for entering my contest


  • Accidentally Poetic
    March 17, 2008
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    This poem is wonderfully written. Well Done.


  • DAMSELx
    January 20, 2008

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    It is the worst feeling to love someone while you watch them love somebody else. I know the feeling all too well. You have portrayed these feelings in a graceful but sad way, very well done.

    Thank you for entering and good luck!


  • Chrissi
    December 17, 2007
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    this is an awesome poem!!!


  • psychiatrists dream
    December 10, 2007
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    wonderfully written.thanks for entering and good luck!


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    December 8, 2007
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    Nicely done
    Thank you for sharing this
    I wish you the best of luck in this contest!


  • lindaburns gold member
    November 24, 2007
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    I find your words interest and vibrant. Thank you for entering my contest.


  • ThatONEweirdChick
    November 21, 2007
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    Wow this poem is very nice. I like how you explain how much the person means to you and then go into that you don't think you'll be able to have them. Just remember that you never know, something can always come out of something..even if it feels like nothing. Hold on! Thanks for entering this into the contest.

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 24, 2007
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    Thank you for your heartfelt entry, Josephine


  • Griswold silver member
    October 21, 2007

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    Very well written for this unusual contest, A great write indeed, very well done. Bless you in all you do...Scott


  • Nam
    October 21, 2007

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    "I always know, that it will mean not much." - I think you should reverse the words "mean not" to "not mean", I think that would read better than what you have.

    A nice poem that you have written here.


  • opaqueangel
    August 6, 2007
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    Very great peice. Good luck in the contest.


  • bananasfoster42
    August 2, 2007

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    great write! haha, i feel i can relate to this on a level. thanks for entering

    (and i saw your option on the comment page too. ty)

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