I kept my mouth closed
tight
sealed up
didn't say a word
now I regret everything
the days pass
trying to find someone to blame
can't blame myself
need to love myself
placed the knife upon my wrist
right then you walked in
I didn't move
hoping you would walk away
instead you moved towards me
I pressed the knife in
didn't cut
you looked unhappy
didn't want you to see me this way
your hand so gentle
as you caressed my arm
taking the knife you kissed my wrists
then you kissed my lips
didn't want you to leave
but you gave me the knife back
then you left
I can't do it!
I can't cut!
watched the knife
pierce the window screen
then fall upon the roof below
why did you do this to me?!?
I need to let the pain out
but I can't hurt you
not at the same time
not because of me
noticing how you helped me
I ran to find you
searched everywhere
but you were no where
until I searched my heart
the strong desire lead me to you
where you were sitting silently in the grass
then you pulled me down and kissed me gently
the price of your happiness if the vision of mine
A contest entry
- "Felt" poetry. ONLY by shirk.
1500 points, ended October 8, 2007, 110 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~♥~ Hopeless Romantics and Other Sad Love Poems ~♥~ by Shassidy.
525 points, ended April 21, 2008, 67 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a great piece! I really like the emotion and flow in this because it makes it powerful. My favorite part is lines 10-25 because those are the lines with the most powerful emotion in them. I like the opening of this piece as well because it fit in with the title. The title is original and it reflects the poem well, so great job with that. Great job and good luck in the contest!
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Nice - not what I think is your best
It is moving but not my taste in poetry
I am over my black day/nights and now in mellow yellow/orange heading for champaigne white bubbly floating away.
Nice working and vvery pictorial.
B D
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wow...this is extremely good...i could pic. every part of it...
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wow i love it it is so well done and really well written
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this was awesome. i totally pictured it all. it definately rang very true and clear for me. brought back some memories. very nice imagery.
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omfg..this is amazin
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You really think so? Thanks ^.^
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this is pretty good... I like the way you did the poem... and the lines, it's cool! lol. good work! keep it up! (CORYYYY! lol)
Crimson
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