I can see it coming again
The darkness that came before
Its watching and waiting
To catch me when the time is wrong
So I must sing my final song
About life and love
Hope, happiness and passion
Of course the darkness doesn’t ask questions
It only waits to settle upon us
To claim are minds, hearts and souls
The darkness comes, and holds
Out a hand, a hand I hold
It leads me to a window,
and I fall
the darkness has come
and now it goes
but mama
it was the darkness that fell
so don’t mark my death as a suicide
and please oh please don’t cry
the darkness doesn’t ask questions
so neither will I
A contest entry
- Silenced angels :) by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
1000 points, ended August 17, 2007, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything. by Andii.
600 points, ended September 15, 2007, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - shock me, PLEASE! (been extended) by Jiyo.
3000 points, ended August 10, 2007, 65 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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great, this is a poem that u have to read a few times to get every thing in which takes a great poet to do having people read ur stuff alot will want then to read more of ur work
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this poem speaks, you have to listen to what it says if you want to understand it, good job
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Yet another wonderful poem by you. I really liked this write because when I was a teen I could have related a lot. I liked how you said
"it was the darkness that fell
so don’t mark my death as a suicide"
Those two lines made the ending even more heartfelt and emotional. This is one of the deepest poems I've read in a long time. It wasn't your typical "I hate life and I'm going to kill myself" poems, it was something different.
Casey
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Wow this is totaly amazing it is a very powerful write it's very emotional. anyways
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wow this was a powerful write which showed struggle and pain
it flowed wonderfully and was so emotional
well done and best of luck
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Emotional!
This is an excellent piece, a struggle within ones self, nice flow of words also, thank you for sharing your work!
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ur welcume
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Great poem. love everything about it.
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