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[ It wasn't just a gift, ]

It wasn't just a gift,

trivial and without thought.

My heart is too important,

I never lend it out.

Yet you swayed me

with your words,

touched my very soul,

so I let you come inside,

and take a little home.

Maybe that's the problem

I cared more than i should.

But for just  a moment

I was certain you were moved.

Am i just a dreamer,

I guess the answers yes,

because in the end,

my heart came back,

a shattered broken mess.

 

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  • MissErinMichelle
    October 23
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    beautiful

    I love your style

  • Peteskid gold member
    October 12

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    I like the tone here, in end-rhyme but with the feel of a conversation...listening to someone with something important to say, revealing of the innerself...this is very nicely done...PK


  • ChildTheForsaken
    July 24
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    Moving

    The lines in this poem portray your feelings well. When i read it i could visualise in my mind a young woman finally finding someone who she believed to be the on she could share her heart with. Only to be let down in the end, truly great. Keep writing, your work is top notch.


  • raggyann
    August 30, 2007
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    ah a shattered heart
    pain and lonelyness is how i felt as i read this beauty


  • xxMyBellxx
    August 29, 2007

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    Arh, what a wonderful and emotional write. I enjoyed this poem a lot, each poem I read makes me know and understand you more.


  • Mezclita
    August 16, 2007

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    *gasp*... you're amazing no extraordinary words or anything but the reasoning + meanings are so right on!

    Best of luck with everything n btw, I'm also "with you all the way" <3 Alex

  • coffeeangel316
    August 2, 2007

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    this is the story of my life. I think you pen so beautifully. each or your poems just touched me to the heart and the rhyme is so awesome. I love the flow. I think you did a wonderful job.


  • BumbleBees
    August 1, 2007

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    *sigh* youre so lucky. I can never rhyme that good! It flows so well, I love it!

    Thank you for the comment, I figured it would be rude not to return the favour.

    Apart from that your poetry's amazing, I really enjoyed reading it.

    <3

  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    August 1, 2007

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    -sigs- exactly how i feel right not
    hope your ok mum
    im always here if you want to talk...im a good listerner
    really hope your ok


  • Griswold silver member
    August 1, 2007
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    We will talk
  • Aurora Ceres
    July 31, 2007

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    Oy! Ya know, I just got mine handed back to me and it certainly wasn't returned in the same condition it was given. This makes me ache. I swear, it makes me think of my Nana who said most men just want the chase...so play hard to get. I always thought she just needed more drugs but, I think now there was some wisdom there. Someone told me today to keep my heart guarded and for the first time in my life, and this is the truth, I am. I h ate that feeling. Our hearts are not just some random zippety doo dah gift! They are a part of us, a very deep and intricate part of who we are and we don't just dish it out to anyone and to have it brutalized is wicked. Oh boy, sorry! I love this piece and am sorry. I'm here if ya need me. I have super glue too.

    Sis

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