Devastation;
chaos bound amongst
ominous pewter skies.
Minds frantic in disillusion
under azurite stars and zero gravity.
Bloodstone -
obsidian dreams lost
amongst beryl waves of insecurity.
Onyx eyes pierce a soul
and crumble beneath frail wills.
Jaded;
lives cut and carved
as mannequins of despair.
Mime puppeteers bleed lies
of marooned hope and helpless pleas.
Violacious
dreams of caded hope
beam of destruction through time.
Ressurection; rebirthed as Phoenix
and held prisoner within dormant walls.
Sardoynx tears
left silhouetted against
bleeding fields of cracked moonstone.
Fallen angels waltz on roads
bejeweled of topaz and zircon
only to find themselves lost
amongst the damned in
volatile angst; succumed
by shades of gray.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Enjoyed.
Very, very much.
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I've written a book of "rock and mineral" poems--just the names vibrate with color and meaning. Then when you put them together, balancing one against the other, the lines sing.
Stanza 2 seems the strongest. It lets the stones work hard without trying too hard to explain everything. You might not even need "of insecurity"--it brings something abstract into a concrete poem, and the juxtaposition of "beryl" and "waves" is intriguing enough on its own.
You've a good sense of rhythm and balance, of how to put stanzas together. BUT--spelling? ("devistation"?) -
Awww it turned out amazing. Shades of gray is the name of my favorites songs! This is beautiful Kris.. ♥♥♥♥♥
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Loved.
Crazy amazing.
♥
I really like it o-o
Like...
A WHOLE LOT
I cant even say anything because it's THAT good.
♥Keara
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