Ever want to make a friend,
and end up with an enemy
they all end up that way in the end,
Guess alone is the way I was meant to be
Ever want to learn something new,
only find out the world is the same, cold and cruel,
And still there is nothing you can do,
Trying just shows you for a fool.
Ever want to be together,
find some purpose to life,
but find your misery is forever,
And that death is a good end to the strife.
Ever just want to be,
Be held in somebody's heart when it's done,
I know I won't be but an unwanted memory,
I might love myself, but look like I'm the only one.
Author notes
Whatever, people can fuck off for all I care, this is what I think about when I'm awake. Yeah, it's possibly the most miserable existence I've ever contemplated too.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 22 of 22
-
To,To,To true.The first line I can relate to all to well.This is a true poem,of thought,and of realite....The second part is what stood out to me more than any of this
"Ever want to learn something new,
only find out the world is the same, cold and cruel,
And still there is nothing you can do,
Trying just shows you for a fool."
Thank you for this wonderful poem
LadysDragon
-
what a beauty, a poem I really liked very true when you are diferent to others don`t try to join them
follow your path not theirs
. Rewarded 4
-
they all end up that way in the end,
Guess alone is the way I was meant to be
ok so there were a bunche of parts i loved but as i was copying and pasting them, i found i was pretty much copy and pasting your whole poem,lol
so just fyi, if you dont get that i loved the whole poem, i think it was truely amazing, and yeah great work keep up the talent and love lots...xxxx -
very good showin your look on it and how you fell about things in life i love these tyepes of poams there always touching to me i loved and and thanks for maikng it
love love love love one of my favs -
I like this> it honest raw emotions straight from your guts. As to the error in the last line. Oh forget it you know what it is and thats all that really matters. so to put this in my words aaawesome
-
well, there was very little in this poem. you probably dont care about my opioion based on your author notes, but i'll common anyways. other than the first lines there is nothing to really make this a great poem besides your emotions. The words are common everyday words that are played out and lost their power, you do not spin your sentice in a creative way that will draw you're readers into your point of view. instead you just hit them with raw bland emotion. probly thirty seconds after i done reading this i will every single a part of it. It made zero impression on me.
-
-
Fair enough
It was more or less trying to write in a more simple fashion than usual. Glad to see both sides of the story
Also amusing is that nobody has picked up on the most glaring error (give you a hint, last line)
-
-
I am sure that we have all felt like this
at some point in our lives. It's true that
no matter how hard you try, you can never
get ahead in this life. Someone or something
will always be there to try and shoot you down
as you move up and beyond your goals in life.
It's really a terrible reality that we all face
each day. Great work with expressing yourself
in this one. Well done and thanks a lot for
sharing this one here!
Jeremy0826 -
This is great. To be able to write down your true feelings for the world to see shows your very true self. I think this is excellent. Keep writing my friend
. Rewarded 4
-
another amazing write
hahahha i love you!, well your writting
but i totally know how this goes except i don't love myself, lol!
my favorite lines are:
"Ever just want to be,
Be held in somebody's heart when it's done,
I know I won't be but an unwanted memory,
I might love myself, but look like I'm the only one."
for some reason this really touches me...awwww but you can talk to me =]
my name is Stephanie, lol!
amazing write, and i'm sure someone else loves you!
<3
stephanie =]
. Rewarded 8
-
Onofognol is sooo right! There are people out there, like me and him, who can identify to this. I love the fact that you havent tried to use big words to make your poem...i dont know...more complex or something. Big up, this is a poem that describes how i feel!
. Rewarded 6
-
You need to cheer up
I probably have no clue what you're going through. But you do need to realise there will be someone else who loves you apart from yourself. I loved the subtle anger in this.. So honest and true. Nicely written overall. -
wow
i am here for you if you ever need to talk! This is so good! Please keep writing, and, most importantly, keep you chin up, never give up!
-
Familiar
I won't even begin to offer any sort of consolation, I know the feeling and it will not do any good. I felt you expressed your thoughts simply and straight, candidly, if you will. I am proud of your manifesto of sorts, i think many will identify with it and maybe feel better knowing that they are not the only people that feel this way. I can identify more thatn words will say. Kudos for the honest write and good luck, I know we all need it.
. Rewarded 8
-
A wonderful poem of honest open writing - a loneliness that's clearly depicted. Your style is symplistic, but the focus of the poem - its content has far reaching depths. I believe that the person in the poem might me alone, but in understanding the self's own loneliness, he/she will be able to be there for those that are in the same situation. I call this endopahy, a knowing of how others feel within yourself - more than empathy. Keep up the writing - there are others outside that you are reaching. FransB
. Rewarded 8
-
You have penned some very painful thoughts and emotions here. This makes me feel very sad. I hope you are in a better place now. Keep your pen handy dear poet!
midnight lace -
I can totally relate to the feeling in this. I've sometimes felt like I'm the only one who can't keep a friend. Why do they all turn into such assholes? Great write. Job well done.
. Rewarded 4
-
YEs, i've wanted to make a friend only ended up not trusting anybody and somtiems it feels lame and sucks but its best that way because then you dont get attached.have my personal reasons.good poem.
-
A wonderful write. A bit dark and angry but well done. If you don't fit in with those around you rest assured there are others don't fit into the cliques either. Speaking from experience, you'll find someone. Til then tell the rest of them to take a hike. Keep writing.
. Rewarded 6
-
well, your poem definately is meaninful, and... i sort of feel the emotion coming from it. but u know what, and i am honestly speaking from personal experience. aright, heres the deal, am the weird type that most of the people i know literraly HATE,, and i know the meaning of this word very well. well ... lets say, it shouldnt stop you. if you were good enough a person to write a poem as good of a read as this one, then heck, screw them all, they arnt worht it. sorry for the long comment, but your poem moved me. thax for that. and trust me, there IS someone out there who will make you feel diferently. thanx again
. Rewarded 8
-
I just submitted my poem and it did this too! It erased all of my other lines! It's a bug, I guess, but can our poems be retrieved? 
*bursts into sudden despair* 
Adding your comment:
1 - 22 of 22
