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Reaching Love

Frantic insatiable desire for your affection
  Our bodies dissolving to the form of one
    Reaching a state of nirvana from your intoxication

    Moving into your universe
      Your skin is my sanctuary

    Loving in your kiss as
    Oceans envious of our flow
  Venturing the heaven of you
  Entwined in the warmth of your touch
Realising it's you I love

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  • cyberwaif
    July 8
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    wow another strong one quite simply this leaves me breathless, very nice write


  • EternitysLastWish
    January 31, 2008

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    Aww, I love this! I really do!
    At so many points during this poem does the reader think "yes, that's it exactly" that you could have accurately described true love.
    I like the use of language, from the start it is very mystical, almost a bit magical, but beautifully written. "Oceans envious of our flow" a great line, says so much with so little. And then, at the end of the poem the last line wraps it up and it seems so simple compared to the rest of the language you've used but it works, it really does, it just seems to top it off, that you have a feeling so strong and after all that's happened, you've realised where your heart is and that is all that matters.

    A wonderful write, friend, as always

    ELW x


    • McFairy
      February 1, 2008
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      Thank you

      That was a really nice comment... thank you so much, it means a lot to me!! <3


  • redradical
    November 6, 2007

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    This is beautifully done, Helen. Took me two reads to realize it was also an acrostic. Great work and very sweet. I guess I'm a bit late to this one though.

    -Ryan


  • CourtneyJean
    August 4, 2007
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    This is a beautiful write...that's all I can say. Beautiful

  • Aurora Ceres
    August 1, 2007

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    The rhythm of your poem really suits the sentiments you carry. I love the lines, ' your skin is my sanctuary', 'venturing the heaven of you.' Awwwww I want!! Lol Wonderful penning with this piece. Thank you, so much, for entering and best of luck to you.

    Bella

    • McFairy
      August 2, 2007
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      YAY.. green for me!!! Thank you lots and lots and more lots!!

      • Aurora Ceres
        August 2, 2007
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        And, you are weclome. I really did love this.

      • Aurora Ceres
        August 2, 2007
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        Ohhh!! I looooooooooove the new picture! McHotty! IS that new? Love your hair.


        • McFairy
          August 2, 2007

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          Nah it was taken in January, Im seeing what kind of feed back I'll get whether I should change it back to blonde or not!!

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