I know I have been gone
for all too long a time,
but let me please explain.
I have not left you all,
nor moved to sunny Spain.
I know I have been gone,
but I had need for rest.
I did what I dreamt do.
I traveled far and long,
and visited Peru!
I know I have been gone,
and let my muse go numb.
I have stressed and I strived.
With good friends such as you
my muse will be revived.
I know I have been gone,
no bad apologies.
I promise I am back!
Now let me read your work
to get me back on track.
© Jim T. Henriksen
July 31st, 2007
Author notes
Thanks for any comment, I am just happy to be back. Thanks Gary for hosting a contest to inspire me, and my AP family and friends for joining. Love you all!
A Monchielle is a poem in a style I created myself... The rules are as follows: first line repeats in each stanza, it consist four stanzas in total, each stanza consists of five lines, each line consists of six syllables, and lines three and five rhyme. The pattern is "Abcdc Aefgf Ahiji Aklml".
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As always, a fine piece of work, Jim!
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"Let my muse go numb" - yeah, kind of says what I think. I don't believe in "writer's block", as they call it, just lack of self-discipline. There are always ways to write, even if it's just sitting down and describing something as simple as the room you're in. I hope that that is what you're trying to suggest by that line - if not, please correct me. Great write. x
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Very good!
That was exactly what I meant with the line. I never have writer's block, it is just that some times my muse is not telling me what to write. You know what I mean. Thanks for the comment, and for the applause, I appreciate it!
Jim
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Fair
Did you REALLY go to Peru?! -
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Yes,
I was in Peru. I was in Lima, I was in Cuzco, I saw Maccu Pichu, I was in the Amazon jungle, only thing I did not have time to see of what I wanted to see, was the Nasca lines. Well, next time. Jim
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good you are back
just as i am thinking of going!
take gentle care
elaine
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Sorry to hear that...
Thanks for the comment, and the applauses! I am sorry to hear that you contemplate on leaving us though. I hope you change your mind, or atleast that you will be back soon, when your muse makes your mind spill over with poetry. We will miss you a lot, Elaine! Take care, my friend!
Jim
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Yay! I about hopped out of my socks when you mentioned "sunny Spain". BECAUSE THAT IS WHERE I LIVE! Im sitting here in Spain, writing this comment and no one ever mentions Spain in a poem! Yay! Viva Espana! Ole! Oh, and I hope you had a great time in Peru! Nicely written and I'll have to try that style of a poem. I like it. blablablooey12
ps...This picture was taken near my school. In SPAIN!
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The rain in Spain stay mainly in the plain...
I didn't know you live in Spain! Or maybe I did, but I had forgotten it.
I had to find something rhyming with explain, so I went for Spain. Other rhymes could have been plane, Maine, feign. 
Thanks for the comment, and for the applause. Check my newest poem, I know you will like it! 
Take care! Jim
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I really enjoyed this write...and it's nice to have you back!
debbie
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Hi Debs!
Thanks for the comment, and for the applause! Check my newest poem, I know you will love it. Jim
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heyyyyyyyyyyyy, you're back.
This is great to have you back here. I see your muse is back too. Hey, tell me you were gone looking for your muse?
Welcome back again.
Shahrzad
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I am baaaaack!
Not so often as I wish, but once in a while to post a new poem. I was in a way going away to look for my muse, as she and our son had gone to Peru on vacation a few weeks earlier than I could. It was great to see Cuzco, Machu Pichu, the Amazon river, Lima, and many other places. Thanks for the comment, and the applauses, Shahrzad (and thanks for the funny mails you keep sending). Check my newest poem if you like... Hugs, Jim
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Jim, It's so good to see your words again and you come right back with a monchielle that is beautiful. We will have to do a little hitchhiking through the galaxies now that you are here again. As always you come through shining with your "moose" shifting into warp speed and sending us soaring with your words so sparkling. It's good to have you back bro and I look forward to more. Keep the ink flowing. Love and hugs for you and the family, your sis Joyce
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Hehe...
I can always count on that you spin in hitchhiking into the comment now and then, and this time was no different. Sorry for not answering this sooner, I kind of forgot to check replies on this poem, with work taking most of my time and all. Thanks for the comment, and for the applause. Big hug for you and your husband. Jim -
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I thought maybe you were spacejacked out there somewhere. LOL Now you do know I had to work in that galactic hitchhiking thing somehow in my comment or it wouldn't be me. hehehe You're so very welcome bro and thank you again for bringing your "moose" back to AP where it belongs. z for you and the family. Joyce
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