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Torchlit Path of Ponder

 

so still the light,

in shadows

     rising

 

cast in effervescence,

sighing

 

cradled in lost arms of darkness

clinging deftly for small purchase,

scrape of breath's soft hiss in anger

lust for seasons newer danger

 

    

     fallen feathers

     litter sidewalks

 

 

cushion heads in breaking banter,

erupting steam spurts blackened eyes

 

waxen skin

in lamplight

     stricken

 

torn asunder, novel lies

reap in sorrow,

fading bruises

 

searching dimmer minds

much greyer,

buzzing flap of flies

in heat

 

stirring, in a half life woken

eye of newt and double token

 

pulling wings and legs in fingers,

bursting bodies

 

     pop

 

in measure

 

 

scraping truth from barrels bottom

singed in error, timeless daughter,

hope to stymie glittered treasure

stealing Souls most envied pleasure

 

 

     handsome land

     in core of rotten

 

 

lost in shadowed

words of stutter

 

tortured wind,

blows sputtered flame

of brandished bandied ministries,

 

     forgotten

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Lust/Hope


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  • Desire gold member
    August 7, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Love this piece penned and to go from Lust and bridge in Hope
    That is a feat but You did it with ease!
    Magnificent take on the Prompt for this Challenge~~

    So can I have Your autograph now please

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
    Many blessings to You in the Challenge
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Scarlet Ambrosia
    August 2, 2007

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    this piece simply blew me away, short yet such a powerful piece!! Well done!

    Scarlet


  • luckynsincere Greeters member
    August 1, 2007

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    now, I can not say one bad thing about this piece. I feel this is BY FAR one of my favs by you. This is an impressive piece. It is deep and can have and hold various meanings not only to you, but to the reader. There is a darkness dwelling here... I find this side of you very exciting....

    Here I must disagree with Bear (kiss) on one small thing... the broken stanzas actually turn me onto this poem. I hate boring. This is quite the contrary. Not only is the form and flow superb... but I actually think this is one of your better worded poems since I have started reading you. It is simple... yet so very complex. THis will be tough to beat my dear. If you keep this up... well... hmmm... you need to keep this up. Wel done.

    Your score from me is 100.

    I rarely give a perfect score. But, holding these challenges... I read a lot of the same poets week after week. This was refreshing. If your name had not been stated on this page, I honestly would not have known who wrote it. That is perhaps the biggest compliment I have ever EVER given in this challenge. I am VERY impressed!

    Always,
    Mel


  • omega13
    August 1, 2007

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    Wow I liked this alot, I like the direction you've been going in lately. It seems like you've been given some inspiration from somewhere, I guess the hubby has been catching your eye a little more lately huh. Once again, great poem.


  • Arkbear gold member
    August 1, 2007

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    cradled in lost arms of darkness

    clinging deftly for small purchase,

    scrape of breath's soft hiss in anger

    lust for seasons newer danger

    scraping truth from barrels bottom

    singed in error, timeless daughter,

    hope to stymie glittered treasure

    stealing Souls most envied pleasure

     

    Those two stanzas are the Dynamite in your write ~

    I am glad I started reviewing with this one, as you gave me

    a lift in *Hope* that this is going to be one hell of a Round ~

    Your *Lust* to win this Round is felt all over my fur ~

    Goosebumps from this Read ~

    Excellent job Wolfy!

    The Graphic Art is so frikkin intense as well ~

    This excites me!

    You took your Quill and filled it with fresh Ink ~

    Kick Butt entry!

    The only thing I am going to hit you on is *Flow* ~

     

    Broken stanzas, (which I do myself ), can be distracting if not placed

    properly below the next, so that the tongue flows from one line to the other ~

     

    Other than that....superb efforts!

     

    Love the last lines in each of those mentioned stanzas ~

    Bear ~

    99.5

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