I’ve failed to see your beauty and personal needs
Always seeing through you, not hearing your plea
Mostly because I lingered to long with my reflection
Slighting you physical attention, denying all affection
Occurring every hour every minute becomes undone
Resurrecting past differences, being antagonistic for fun
Realizing my faults and errors in every way
You remain my first and only love each and every day
Author notes
11. Everyone is going to hurt you, you just have to decide who's worth the pain...*
Sad thoughts and regretful actions
In a list
A contest entry
- ....and you can quote us on that.... by shutter-bug.
600 points, ended October 3, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For Love by live in love.
500 points, ended October 9, 2007, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Just visiting some of your pieces. I love this one, so sincere.
K♥
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Thank U Ka! This was a real one
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Very well written esp the last two lines..Congrats on the HM!
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Thank U so much.
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Welcome
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very nicely written
thanks for entering
good luck
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Thank u
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i liked your poem but i liked what the author notes had to say even more. thank you for that great piece of wisdom, i needed ot hear it tonight. viyanna rosemarie
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Thanks Viyanna - You are more than welcome - I used that note from some where. It means a lot. Thx - michael
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wow, this was the first acrostic poem i've read that rhymed. very nice job!!! i really enjoyed reading this, it was a great take on the prompt. thank you for entering!!!
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thank you so much. I like to be as creative as possible.
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oh that is so sad i loved it!! Very true and touching! thanks for entering..... i'm the co-judge so ya great job!!!
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love it so true sad is it not that so many amazing poeple are over look because we are to cold in heart to give not even a second glance great read
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Thank U so true, also we need to be human enough to admit our mistakes. ~thxs
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Loved the words that felt sincere and sorrowful,found the green font uneasy on the eye and not married to the intent of the write,green is surely for jaded,for envy,jealousy or even naievity yet the poet voices a lesson learned and is healing and dealing the deck of past dealt cards,don't be offended by my opinion,so many times I am the only one that holds that opinion and it is your creativity but had to in all honesty mention the greenery amongst the scenery of sweet forsaken love
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LOL!!! I guess you haven't got use to me yet. I love when people critique my work, presentation what ever. Its so I can get better. I know their are plenty folks on here that goes bananaS over a review but that does make sense. Also since a picture was inserted(part of the presentation) I just matched colors. Not good I guess. But at least you like the piece. Did you catch the acrostic form?
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touching
love is awesome,but yet very daring,commits are great and the heart is full of sharing your emotions,I wish you luck,PM
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Thank U - I felt good expressing this. Thanks for your comments.
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Thank U - poets are emotional and its usually to the extreme so I went there to express something that i'm not. I'm all into affection. I'm the one that begs for it
So thank U. It came through realistically. ~ mikeeeeeeeee
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how very sad this write is. i hope that the one you wrote it for gets a chance to read it. thank you for sharing your heart with me through this write. viyanna rosemarie
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Thank U 4 your kind words. I wrote it because people, friends and family goes through this every day. I'm the emotional hog so it was easy to write someone that wasn't giving it to me. ~ it is part of me ~ MyKeY
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Emotional
Like the acrostic mykey
I like how you explain what went wrong
Hugs onesugar
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Thank U ~ I can spin a good acrostic or two and wanted your opinion. So I thank you dear lady
MIKeeeeeeeeee
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I loved the poem. It had that kind of chaotic sense, like you would find in an extremely emotional apology, which really brings the poem to life.
I like the structure, it was well thought out. It also embodies the rhythm of an apology between two people. The brief and akward first lines and then the drawn out part where you attempt to explain what went wrong. I really liked it. It flowed nicely. -
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Thank U - part of it was the Acrostic structure as well. Had to place words in very selective places. But I'm very glad U picked up on the purpose of writing it that way. ~myKey
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Very beautiful write and it seem you are so heart felt in your sorry. Very good poem. Very good read.
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Thank U so much. A friend likes acrostic forms so I wrote one for her ~ mikEEEEEEEEEE
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Wounderful! A great write! I through you a rose
and blw you a kiss ♥
Keep writing, God Bless
~Amber
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